New York State Route 273 ( | talk | history | links | watch | logs) review
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The prose needs some work. The 2nd paragraph of the Old roads section needs to be re-written. For example:, 800 shares of $20 to... 800 shares valued at $20 each?
IMO there's some wordy sentences that should be shortened. Here's what I found:
These are all easily fixable, and I'm willing to change to support once addressed. Dave ( talk) 03:38, 20 August 2008 (UTC) I no longer oppose promotion. However, I'd like a 2nd opinion on the prose before voting support. I'm not sure if it really is an issue or just we have different styles, but IMO could still use a copyedit. Let me sit on it for a day or two. Dave ( talk) 05:06, 21 August 2008 (UTC) reply