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His nose was broken in an American football game and his family lacked the money to get it fixed, so it remained that way for the rest of his life. I presume his nose healed, but probably out of place? This could be revised.
When the Commander-in-Chief of the Asiatic Fleet, Admiral Harry Yarnell, asked for four additional cruisers to help evacuate American citizens from the Shanghai International Settlement. Grammatically incorrect.
Leahy accepted this presidential decision, as he always did, even when he strongly disagreed. Is this really worth mentioning? Of course officers were supposed to accept direction from the president, that's just how it works. It would be more noteworthy if Leahy disregarded instructions from the president.
He was then reassigned to the Glacier a stores ship which was engaged in bringing supplies from Australia to the Philippines. Needs a comma after "Glacier".
The second use of USS for Princess Matoika ([...] Commanding Officer of the USS Princess Matoika [...]) is unnecessary and inconsistent with other subsequent mentions of USN vessels in the article.
There are a number of personal touches that I cannot quite square with the encyclopedic voice; they strike me as more biographical (ironically enough) at best, and conciliatory at worst (i.e. [...] Leahy handled personnel matters with care and consideration [...]).
I have additionally converted several spellings to American English (ie "socialised" to "socialized"), as this is a biographical article about an American.
Waging a two-ocean war as part of a coalition revealed serious deficiencies in the organization and American high command when it came to formulating grand strategy: [...] What organization / Organization of what?
I think Hap Arnold should be linked in the caption to the image of the JCS at lunch; I understand he is first linked in the paragraph immediately next to it, but Marshall is also first linked in the paragraph immediately above it.
Roosevelt had a Map Room constructed in the White House [...] Recommend retooling this sentence so that this is rendered as "the Map Room", as the link here is to the Map Room at the White House specifically. I see, "Roosevelt had the Map Room constructed at the White House, where large maps displayed the progress of the war."
[...] Leahy informed them Roosevelt was adamant that it was vital that American forces to take the field against Germany in 1942 [...] Recommend "vital for American forces to take the field", or "vital that American forces take the field".
[...] fearing that the Navy would lose its aviation and the Marine Corps. Can you elaborate on "aviation" here? I assume you mean the Navy's aviation elements, and the loss thereof to the US Air Force.
Y Changed to "naval aviation". The US Navy feared that the new US Air Force would gain control of all aviation, including that on ships. This happened to the Royal Navy when the Royal Air Force was created in 1918.
Hawkeye7(discuss)08:50, 3 July 2022 (UTC)reply
In December, doctors diagnosed Leahy's health problems as a partial blockage of the kidneys. This is the first mention of any health problems from Leahy if I recall correctly.
What I meant is that the section retreads July 23; it mentions twice that his funeral was on that date. I think the detail about the pallbearers is fine. –
♠Vami_IV†♠09:45, 3 July 2022 (UTC)reply
MOS:SECTIONLOC says that the image should be placed in the relevant section, and there is nowhere in the Early life section where it can go. Placing it after the section creates another
MOS:SANDWICH, so the only alternative is to remove the image entirely. I'll see if someone else has an opinion on the matter.
Hawkeye7(discuss)23:43, 17 July 2022 (UTC)reply
"He was given his first command, the gunboat USS Mariveles" Which rank did he have at the moment?
"$100 million in WPA funding (equivalent to $1488 million in 2020)" --> "$100 million in WPA funding (equivalent to $1,488 million in 2020)" or change it to billion.
"On April 13, Leahy gave Truman the regular" Maybe add something like "On April 13, Leahy gave to the new President Truman the regular" or "On April 13, Leahy gave to Roosevelt's successor Truman the regular"?
During its appearance on DYK, this article ran up 19,511 page views, which is quite astonishing for a non-lead article. There was some astonishment that Leahy was the highest-ranking US officer in World War II, when he is so little known.
Hawkeye7(discuss)23:51, 17 July 2022 (UTC)reply
File:NH 91537 William D. Leahy as a naval cadet.jpg - Does the NHHC claim of copyright indicate that it's a US Navy photograph? Otherwise, the file source information isn't clear as to if this is a official cadet portrait or rather a privately-produced picture
The claim of ownership means that the image was part of a set donated to the US Naval History and Heritage Command by Leahy. I believe it was taken for the Annapolis yearbook. So it is now in the public domain.
Hawkeye7(discuss)05:18, 27 September 2022 (UTC)reply
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