Adding two penn'orth to the above: in the FA article on Round the Horne we followed the usual Wikipedia convention of using the present tense: "...is a radio show" etc. For the ITMA FA we used the past tense – "was a radio show" etc – because little of it survives in recordings and it is seldom heard on air, whereas Round the Horne receives frequent, one might almost say regular, rebroadcasts decades after its first transmission. Much Binding has had a few outings in the years since the first broadcasts, but SchroCat and I think that the past tense, à laITMA, is the right one here. We'd be glad of reviewers' thoughts on this point. Tim riley talk18:20, 28 June 2024 (UTC)reply
Schminnte
I'll take a crack at this one, looking forward to a good read.
I feel that it should be explicitly stated that this is a radio comedy in the first sentence, à la ITMA.
If we say "was a radio comedy", that would mean repeating the word "radio" three times in the sentence
This would work if taken along with the suggestion just below, but I see what you mean otherwise - S
More generally, I think the first sentence would benefit from discussing Murdoch and Horne instead of the broadcaster, since they were the constant throughout.
Could broadcast from 1944 to 1950 and 1951 to 1954 by BBC Radio and in 1950–51 by Radio Luxembourg be rephrased in relation to the BBC, something like "broadcast from 1944 to 1954 by BBC Radio, with one season broadcast by Radio Luxembourg in 1950–1951"? This reduces repetition and sounds more natural to me.
Singers in the musical interludes in the show included Gwen Catley, Maudie Edwards. Binnie Hale and Doris Hare. To remove repetition, try "Singers in the show's musical interludes included Gwen Catley, Maudie Edwards, Binnie Hale and Doris Hare"?
Background
I think the ITMA in brackets should be italics.
Stand Easy for the
Army and, for the
Royal Air Force superfluous space after comma.
a BBC radio show for the Air Force, based on those who worked for the RAF Balloon Command comma is unnecessary.
Many thanks. Most of these done, but I need to have a chat with the one-armed bandit, once he is able to type properly again. -
SchroCat (
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17:20, 6 July 2024 (UTC)reply