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Lost FA status mainly because of poor info on the reception of the game. I'm sure with a little work we can return this to FA status.

Thanks, Buc ( talk) 18:13, 5 May 2008 (UTC) reply

Dihydrogen Monoxide

Since reception was the issue, here are some notes on that...you can get feedback on the rest if you like - just ask and I'll do it when I have time!

Might as well just review it all. Buc ( talk) 16:36, 8 May 2008 (UTC) reply

Will do when I get the chance. dihydrogen monoxide ( H₂O) 23:25, 8 May 2008 (UTC) reply

• Shouldn't the metacrtic review box score be based on reviews, not votes?
• IGN shouldn't be in italics in references (etc.) - noticed this on ref 81
• "The game was generally well-received by the media, and was given high scores by some of the most prominent gaming critics." - this is kinda meaningless, as the reviews box and subsequent commentary should give this impression...
• First para of reception is awkward...basically just listing scores for the first half, then you start quoting etc. It basically needs re-organisation; eg. quote IGN when you first give the score (more than just "incredible")
• "Further criticism came from the website Adrenaline Vault" - if it's a website, it shouldn't be in italics (if it's a magazine, it should).
• A lot more general receptive commentary is necessary for such a major game...plenty of VG FAs do this well, but basically a short paragraph like that isn't enough...
  • Can you recommend one? Buc ( talk) 16:36, 8 May 2008 (UTC) reply
    • Super_Smash_Bros._Brawl#Reception_and_sales; currently at FAC. dihydrogen monoxide ( H₂O) 23:25, 8 May 2008 (UTC) reply
      • Hmm that's a bit too different a game really, and it's brand new while this is about ten years old. Any exsample you could recommend? Buc ( talk) 08:08, 12 May 2008 (UTC) reply
        • Interesting - Bole, is this somehow related to why you added Brawl's entire reception section into MGS's reception section (without changing anything at all)? I question that action. -- haha169 ( talk) 05:22, 20 May 2008 (UTC) reply
• "Members of GameFAQs ranked it the 8th best" - 8th best WHAT? (same with next sentences)

dihydrogen monoxide ( H₂O) 10:04, 8 May 2008 (UTC) reply