I am requesting a review of this article before nominating it for FAC. To summarize the topic, Hotline Miami 2 is a 2015 video game that is a sequel to 2012's
Hotline Miami. It is particularly notable for being banned in Australia due to a scene that features sexual assault, and is still refused classification in that country to this day. I recently got the article through GAN, and if all goes well, it will be my first FAC sometime in 2024. Any comments are appreciated.
"After the proposed length of it surpassed that of the base game, the project was turned into a standalone sequel after ten days and was confirmed to be in development via Twitter." -- This feels a little off to read. Maybe rephrase.
Done.
I don't think you need to repeat the release year twice in the lead.
Removed 2015 from the first sentence.
Linking the genre in the gameplay is wise.
Done.
"Shortly after the release and success of the first game, which sold 130,000 copies in it's first seven weeks," - "Its", not "it's".
Done.
Some rephrasing to make sure citations aren't just stuck in the middle of sentences might be advisable.
Unless you count using some citations at commas, I could only find one reference that was in the middle of a sentence.
Ref 16 is used twice back to back, when both sentences could just use the same reference.
I assume you meant Ref 12 (now 11 since I removed an earlier reference that did nothing) since 16 was only used once in the entire article.
The release section feels a little plodding due to the recitation of dates/events.
Went through and tried to make dates repeat themselves less, though not too much happened in the games marketing and release anyways.
Reduce quotes in the reception section.
I'll have to do this at a different time, but I'll do it eventually before I go to FAC.
"Referred to as "another powerful thing the game gets right" by Thurster of PC Gamer and as "your partner in flow-state induced crime" by Burns of VideoGamer.[22][6]" - Refs wrong way round.
Thanks for the review, I've done all of them right now except lowering quote usage in Reception (which I'll do before FAC, I just can't do it at this exact moment). As for Final Fantasy 16 XVI and TRC, I'll review either one after I review
Penn & Teller's Smoke and Mirrors.
NegativeMP100:03, 9 December 2023 (UTC)reply