This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because, well, I have to. Halo Legends is an upcoming DVD/Blu-Ray release, but I'd like to solicit some comments on the text as-is so that I can add this to the
Halo media featured topic.
Finetooth comments: I have a few suggestions for improvement. Mainly the article needs proofreading to catch and fix small errors in the prose.
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What makes Halo.Bungie.Org or Halo Panel Live Blog reliable?
Lead
"The idea for an anime compilation... ". Wikilink
anime?
"is intended to be a parody of the universe" - "Halo universe" for clarity?
Development
"Microsoft was deeply involved in making sure story details were correct and writing the scripts for the stories—O'Connor estimated that 50% of the dialogue in the final products were verbatim from the original scripts—but the animation studios were given wide latitude in their animation styles." - Awkward. Perhaps " The animation studios were given wide latitude in matters of style, but Microsoft was deeply involved in story details and script writing; O'Connor estimated that 50 percent of the dialogue in the final products were taken verbatim from the original scripts."
"While all the stories save one are considered canon, O'Connor noted that some discrepancies were the cause of artistic interpretation." - Logic? Shouldn't it be "... artistic interpretation caused some of the discrepancies"?
"Produced by Mitsuhisa Ishikawa and directed by Hiroshi Yamazaki, with creative supervision by Mamoru Oshii follows an Arbiter named Fal... " - Missing word?
The Package
"The Package segment is animated by Casio Entertainment" - "The Package, animated... " instead of "The Package is animated"?
Origins
"where Cortana and Master Chief were stranded on after the events of Halo 3" - "Which" instead of "where"? I'll stop pointing out the small proofing errors from this point on. It would be a good idea to get a fresh pair of eyes to proofread the article from top to bottom.