1689 Boston revolt

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I'd like to see this article advance from Good Article class to at least A-Class. For the last two days, I have been working on some (mostly minor) edits to it. I think it would be best to get feedback from other editors regarding the article and its quality. I created it; it was greatly expanded by another user.

Thanks, DCI 2026 15:16, 4 September 2011 (UTC) reply

Brief comments from Nikkimaria

• Per WP:ENGVAR, be consistent in whether you use American or British spelling - for example, you've got both "organized" and "organised"
• The lead seems to be focused on the background of the event, and given the length of the article is a bit on the long and dense side
• WP:OVERLINK - don't link very common terms, and don't link the same term multiple times, particularly in close proximity
• You might include a couple more sentences about Leisler's Rebellion. Nikkimaria ( talk) 16:58, 7 September 2011 (UTC) reply

I changed the intro. I use American English - which do you think would be appropriate? I have not yet checked on overlinking, as I am in a bit of a hurry here. I will be free to revise later today. DCI 2026 20:57, 8 September 2011 (UTC) reply

Comments from Hchc2009:

• As ever, very keen to see more early-modern articles! :)
• The picture used in the infobox is a 19th century depiction, and is from a (relatively) biased source. I think its a good one to use, but the caption might capture that it is a 19th century, Boston authored depiction of the event (have a close look at the governor's face and you'll see what I mean!).
• The use of the word "mob" is often controversial; it might be worth double-checking what the latest scholarship uses (fashions shift a bit between "mob" and "crowd").
• "unpopular laws that turned some New England merchant trading practices into smuggling" - felt a clumsy phrase, might be worth revisiting.
• "The royal troops stationed in Boston, most of whose officers were either Anglican or Catholic, were also disliked. " - if we're saying that few of them were non-Conformist, I'd say it explicitly, otherwise you'll throw some of the readers.
• "nearly bloodless revolution " - you correctly don't use the phrase "bloodless", but recent work has emphasised the amount of bloodshed involved in the revolution, particularly in Ireland.
• "The religious leaders of Massachusetts" - would be worth saying what the religious beliefs were in the region (Catholic, Anglican , non-Conform etc.)
• "pastors" - worth linking?
• " (Mather was arrested, tried, and exonerated on one charge, but Randolph made a second arrest warrant with new charges)," - a fairly big bit to bracket.
• "Sometime before noon an orange flag was raised on Beacon Hill, signaling another 1,500 militiamen to enter the city." - worth explaining why orange was important?
• "they must & would have the Government in their own hands" - you can safely expand "&" to "and" here.

Hchc2009 ( talk) 17:24, 9 September 2011 (UTC) reply