Nominator(s):
DAP (
talk) 01:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)reply
After conducting a significant, months-long overhaul, I present The Grand Budapest Hotel, the
Wes Anderson-directed film of a hotel concierge's (
Ralph Fiennes) quest for fortune and a priceless Renaissance painting with his newly hired lobby boy (
Tony Revolori). The technical achievement of this wonderfully colorful onscreen world makes The Grand Budapest Hotel unique among Anderson's work. It was also a surprise box office success, and (with Moonrise Kingdom) raised the director's profile to a casual audience. It is a fairly new good article, and after a few moderate revisions, I believe this article satisfies the FA criteria. Have at it!
DAP💅 01:43, 25 April 2020 (UTC)reply
I'm not sure how to approach this.
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
ISBNs should be ISBN-13 for works published after January 1, 2007 per
Wikipedia:ISBN, all in the "Bibliography" section should be changed
They initially struggled to develop their idea further, but the experience touring Europe what experience touring Europe? perhaps "an"
This refers to the producers' early location scouting.
The film earned $173 million in box office revenue worldwide what currency?
US dollars. Revised for clarity.
bolstered by fatiguing interest in resurgent studio films hoping to capitalize on the prestige of their accolades and crossover appeal to young, casual moviegoers. not sure what this means
intense (but confusing) shootout with Zubrowkan troops why is it confusing?
The troops were shooting at each other.
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Agatha, who died of illness with their infant son they both died? Did she die while pregnant? Did the son survive but saw Agatha die?
Correct, they both died.
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Though their prototype gave impetus led to?
the nascent Anderson–Guinness collaboration soon stalled cut nascent and soon
He became fascinated maybe quote "fascinated" otherwise it's a bit
WP:SYNTH
well before the project's conception cut "well"
Per custom, Anderson taps into a troupe of longtime collaborators what "custom"? "taps into" is a bit POV, how about "uses"?
This is a routine practice he does in every film.
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
though Fiennes did not refer to them too often, however cut "however"
had long wished to work with Fiennes. how long? If it's a quote quote it
was eager to depart from his famously villainous roles and found Gustave's panache compelling. eager should be quoted, compelling should be quoted, possibly
WP:SYNTH if not, in fact "eager" doesn't appear in the source article once.
Reference 22 needs a (subscription required) template
Not necessarily. The New York Times (and a number of the cited print sources) provide a certain number of free articles before activating their paywall.
DAP💅 05:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
He was initially unsure how to approach his character because the inner workings of The Grand Budapest Hotel left actors little room for improvisation according to whom? Why?
Revised for clarification.
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Fiennes drew on diverse sources according to whom?
WP:PUFF words
Pitfalls beset Aibel's months-long search for prospective actors what actually happened?
WP:SYNTH
Revised for clarification.
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Abraham spent only about cut only
accents to no avail. cut "to no avail"
Ronan's decision to play Agatha with her native Irish accent was Anderson's idea, after experimenting with German, English, and American accents to no avail. They felt that an Irish accent projected a warm, feisty spirit into Agatha. maybe combine with a semicolon
Yeoman drew on → "Yeoman stated he "looked at"
Are they not the same thing?
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
financed by regional and federal film-funding organizations. which ones?
The filmmakers staged their most significant interior what makes them most significant?
Anderson felt so strongly about the WarenhausWP:SYNTH
Therapyisgood, thanks for the feedback! Let me know what you think. I believe I was amenable to most of your concerns unless stated otherwise, though kept inline attribution at a minimum as the text reads much easier without them.
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Oppose the tone isn't where it needs to be in my opinion. It needs a copyedit. Often sounds too promotional, not neutral enough. The files need personality rights templates as well.
Therapyisgood (
talk) 01:47, 14 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Comment by The Squirrel Conspiracy
As I've never seen the film, I'm not 100% sure what
File:The Grand Budapest Hotel (14977721802).jpg is. My initial thought was that it was a still from the film that was put through Flickrwashing, but based on the other images in the set on Flickr and the photographer's body of work, it looks like the photographer might have been on set instead. Whomever does the image review should have an extra look at this one.
The Squirrel Conspiracy (
talk) 07:23, 26 April 2020 (UTC)reply
Comments Support by mujinga
This was an enjoyable and detailed read about a great film.
Lead
"The French theatrical release preceded the film's global rollout on February 26, followed by releases in Germany, North America and the United Kingdom on March 6–7" could be rewritten, maybe just move "on February 26" to after "theatrical release" for clarity. Also maybe mention the North American release as well?
You mean elaborate? There's already a brief mention of the North American release.
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
I thought the US premiere was the same as the release, so scratch that comment. Moving the date really helps that sentence. - done
Mujinga (
talk) 13:12, 8 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Casting
"Ronan's decision to play Agatha with her native Irish accent was Anderson's idea" then it doesn't feel like her decision, maybe it can be rephrased
any answer on this? it's fine if you disagree but i don't know if you overlooked it
Mujinga (
talk) 13:12, 8 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Peek again. I had revised it already.
DAP💅 11:50, 13 May 2020 (UTC)reply
great looks, better now
Mujinga (
talk) 12:00, 16 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Filming
"buying the property from demolition" maybe better "buying the property to save it from demolition"
"a fluid head from Mitchell's OConnor Ultimate product line" - my first thought was that Mitchell was a person, so maybe better to extend to "Mitchell Camera Corporation's"
"Anderson liked the novelty of miniatures, having used them in The Life Aquatic with Steve Zissou (2004) and more extensively in Fantastic Mr. Fox (2009), and the audience's tendency to recognize artificial shots afforded the freedom to employ them again in The Grand Budapest Hotel." - I don't think the second half of the sentence is doing much
"According to the film expert and author Donna Kornhaber, The Grand Budapest Hotel reinforces the increasingly dark subtext of collectivity defining late period Anderson films, extrapolating the worst excesses of otherwise innocent preservation." - I can't check the source and I can't say I really understand what is being said here
Thanks for the screenshot. So she is talking about how Anderson is exploring the darkness of collective action, I see now. I don't think the second half of the sentence is needed. Also on a re-read film expert and author sounds strange for an academic so i would suggest something like "According to the academic Donna Kornhaber, The Grand Budapest Hotel reinforces the increasingly dark subtext of collectivity defining late period Anderson films."
Mujinga (
talk) 13:12, 8 May 2020 (UTC)reply
"so successful that they outperformed the national box office" - didn't see this in source and also don't understand how paris takings could be more than the national takings, which would surely include paris
Per source, "Wes Anderson scored a coup in France this week. The Grand Budapest Hotel opened on Wednesday, booking the best opening numbers in Paris in its first showings."
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
i'm still confused, that doesn't say anything about national box office, so then would suggest to replace "In Paris, The Grand Budapest Hotel screenings were so successful that they outperformed the national box office" with something like "In Paris, The Grand Budapest Hotel screenings were successful" or "In Paris, The Grand Budapest Hotel screenings were the weekend's biggest numbers"
Mujinga (
talk) 13:12, 8 May 2020 (UTC)reply
The caption "FIDM Museum costume exhibit, Los Angeles" could also mention it was costume for Tilda Swinton's character
Mujinga (
talk) 15:07, 30 April 2020 (UTC)reply
maybe "Madame D." for "Madame"
Mujinga (
talk) 13:12, 8 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Mujinga, thanks for the review! Let me know what you think.
DAP💅 07:30, 3 May 2020 (UTC)reply
hiya i made some extra comments - sorry i didn't get the ping for some reason (or see changes in my watchlist) so only noticed this now
Mujinga (
talk) 13:14, 8 May 2020 (UTC)reply
@
Mujinga:, I believe I have addressed all of your concerns. Let me know what you think!
DAP💅 12:05, 13 May 2020 (UTC)reply
great, changing comment to support
Mujinga (
talk) 12:00, 16 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Support from John M Wolfson
I love this movie! I intend to take WikiCup points from this review, and have the following concerns:
Other than that I can't find that much wrong with the article right now, I'll have a better look at this later. –
John M Wolfson (
talk •
contribs) 02:42, 2 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Reserving my spot here for comments in the hope you could return the favor and do a review of
MAX Yellow Line if you have time. --
truflip99 (
talk) 03:09, 9 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Monsieur Gustave H, -- full stop after H (as you have done in the Plot section)
tragedy, war, fascism, nostalgia, friendship, and loyalty. // followed by releases in Germany, North America and the United Kingdom -- inconsistent use of last comma
Tilda Swinton as Madame D., the wealthy dowager and secret owner of the hotel -- is there a reason why you provide the initial for Monsieur and spell out Madame?
Other than laziness? No. Revised.
DAP💅 12:05, 13 May 2020 (UTC)reply
He and the producers toured Budapest, small Italian spa towns and the Czech resort Karlovy Vary before a final stop in Germany // Auditions were held in Egypt, Lebanon, Israel, France, England, and the United States, before revising the role's ethnic criterion. -- incnosistent style here too
Exterior shots of Hainewalde Manor -- Is there a wikilink for this? If not, could you briefly explain what it is?
As Look Effects opened their Stuttgart headquarters after The Grand Budapest Hotel filming wrapped, Sanchez was only able to reference his prior experience with Anderson, and the California-based artist became homesick working his first international assignment. -- this is worded kind off oddly... Why was Sanchez "only able to reference" his experience?
Only four artists from the newly-assembled team -- omit dash
intense greens and golds of the Schloss Lutz evoke oppressive wealth, and the derelict Checkpoint Nineteen decays in a cool bluish-gray tint. -- omit comma, I thinknvm
To age Swinton, makeup artist Mark Coulier applied soft silicone rubber prosthetics -- perhaps link
Prosthetic makeup
and the United Kingdom (a top-three debut, with £1.53 million from 284 theaters) -- convert so it can be comparable with the USD figures in the list
The Grand Budapest Hotel ended its North American run on February 26, 2015.[2] -- perhaps replace this ref with
this instead
American Sniper, Selma and The Imitation Game. -- comma
I believe that's it from me. --
truflip99 (
talk) 17:29, 17 May 2020 (UTC)reply
@
Truflip99: Excellent, I believe I have addressed all of your concerns.
DAP💅 00:45, 24 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Looks great. Supporting on prose. --
truflip99 (
talk) 19:14, 25 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Comments Support from Cas Liber
Taking a look now....
but the frigid weather and reduced daylight of early winter disrupted the shooting schedule - err, why not just "freezing" or "cold" rather than "frigid"?
Ack, prose was good enough that I just lapsed into reading mode (loved the film). Support on comprehensiveness and prose
Cas Liber (
talk·contribs) 04:56, 26 May 2020 (UTC)reply
Thank you very much!
DAP💅 13:07, 27 May 2020 (UTC)reply
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