The article was not promoted by Karanacs 16:45, 11 May 2010 [1].
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This was nominated back in January, and received some support. Other issues were brought up, however, and the nomination did not pass. I believe those issues have now all been addressed, and submit the article again for reconsideration. かんぱい! Scapler ( talk) 21:26, 28 April 2010 (UTC) reply
Comments on the lead.
Please review comma usage with regards to compound sentences. Examples include the following passages (only the first section and the lead are included, other instances of commas being misused in this manner are all over the article):
Other prose issues:
Those blockquotes should at a minimum have quotation marks around them to let readers know that they're quotes. Some readers (like me when I read the article) can get confused between actual article text and a quotation.
The paragraphing is rather choppy especially in the "Character design" section (a few one or two-sentence paragraphs), "Personality" subsection, and "Merchandise and promotion" subsection. Paragraphs need to be full, and paragraphs containing only a couple of sentences are to be avoided.
Also, the caption of the lead image is not within WP:CAPTION; if it is not a complete sentence, then no end-punctuation is used. Also, "pictured" is not needed in the Sir Francis Drake photo.
In general, it's going to need another good comb-through on copyediting to meet 1(a). – MuZemike 22:19, 6 May 2010 (UTC) reply