Hello, Bernice Matos, and
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Hi! I wanted to give you some notes on your draft:
Since your topic will brush against the topic areas of health and medicine, I would like for you to review the training module on
editing in this area.
Make sure that you are only summarizing claims and content in the sources as opposed to synthesizing new material. For example, a source describes something that sounds an awful lot like a cat without actually calling it as such. It would be original research for us to say that it was a cat. I'm concerned that there may be some original research in the article. If you're quoting stuff from the source, it's always good to attribute claims to the specific person or outlet making them along the lines of "According to...".
The article lacks a lead akin to the one in the
water scarcity article. The lead doesn't have to be as lengthy of course, but it should be styled along the same lines as the first few opening sentences. For an example of a shorter lead, examine the lead in
Supply and demand.
Hi! I think that it may be a good idea to blend your work into the existing article on water scarcity, as that article already takes a global look at the topic. What you may want to specifically look at is expanding the section on
global experiences in managing water crisis, at least as far as making large additions or expansions go, as that section is marked as needing work.
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