I believe that there needs to be a change in the way that police are being punished (if even) when they act out on what they deem to be dangerous to them. Within these past years, there have been way to many incidents where innocent lives have been taken, and the police are not even being punished for their actions. To my chosen article of Police Brutality in the United States, I believe that I can add a different perspective that the ideas that are being portrayed now. Along with a different perspective, I also will add more relevant stories that should not be ignored. I truly believe that these policemen are making any little thing try to be seen as "self defense" because they believe this is what will get them out of trouble. They wont stop, and change their wrong actions until America continues to speak up, and not just let this get swept under the rug. Yes all lives matter, and no persons life should be taken for no reason.. but at this point in time, I believe that black lives matter and this is what needs to focused on in. Something needs to change, because enough is enough. With just a few clicks on the internet, I quickly found how many innocent black lives were taken. The Mapping Police reported that in 2016 at least 309 lives were taken.
Warren, Patricia Y. “Race and Policing in America: Conflict and Reform (Review).” Social Forces, Oxford University Press, 11 Feb. 2009, muse.jhu.edu/article/259292. Main Argument:
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What will I contribute?
I will be contributing to the article titled, "Police Brutality in the United States". Already discussed in the article is what police brutality is and when and where it first came about. Also some possible solutions are proposed to decrease the amount of crime that is being enacted. I will continue to speak on what is legal and what is not when pertaining to finding ways to put an halt to this. Also, I will add more recent cases only to emphasize the importance and relevance of the issue. I will also discuss why I think police brutality has become a problem. What begin happening in society that sparked this anger that has seem to become evident in police across America.
Intro - What is police brutality? Where did it come about? Is it legal?
Body Paragraphs - How will we make changes? (I know this is already here, but it is briefly touched on. I will go more in depth because change is essential.) What caused this to be an issue? Reference and add more recent situations. References to Trayvon Martin, Sandra Bland. How has Donald Trump influenced changes currently happening.
Conclusion - Why do we need to make changes? What can be offered now to family members who have lost loved ones due to this crime? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ramanit ( talk
What is missing from the existing article?
This article has a lot of pertinent information, but I feel like more recent additions will be helpful to the article.
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Respond to your peer review
I got feedback from my peer Elge Stevens on my rough draft. I am being really receptive to his feedback as it is helping me better my piece of work. He suggested that I be more formal with my writing. I agree with this as when I was writing, I even thought that I was being too informal. I recognize that this is a Wikipedia entry and I should definitely be more neutral with my writing. This way, more people will find my entry more appealing and actually read it and get find it useful. I just would like to say that to me this is definitely a challenge since my topic is something so recent that I actually see happening.
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Wikipedia:Wiki_Ed/Xavier_University_of_Louisiana/Human_Rights_and_World_History_(Fall_2017). Student assignments should always be carried out using a course page set up by the instructor. It is usually best to develop assignments in your sandbox. After evaluation, the additions may go on to become a Wikipedia article or be published in an existing article. |