The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as
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The result was: promoted by
Vaticidalprophet (
talk) 09:19, 14 September 2023 (UTC)
Note: this is my first review. Anyone may let me know if there are issues. Thanks, NW1223<
Howl at me•
My hunts> 03:14, 27 July 2023 (UTC)
Not a fan of the overly-promotional nature of the hooks ("stands at the forefront" or "stands behind" appears in none of the sources as far as I can see) or of the article ("women's rights activist, lecturer, social activist, strategist and media personality" seems like it could be slimmed down to just the first descriptor) @
NightWolf1223 and
Omert33:. In addition, not every paragraph is sourced, and the prose quality is weak.
~~ AirshipJungleman29 (
talk) 21:16, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
Omert33, thank you for the QPQ. However, I don't see that, even after a month, you have made any attempt to address the other issues raised: the overly promotional hooks, the requested sourcing (at least two paragraphs still have none), and the need to improve the prose quality. Progress needs to be made soon on these aspects if you wish to continue pursuing this nomination. Thank you.
BlueMoonset (
talk) 23:08, 31 August 2023 (UTC)
@
BlueMoonset: 1) I've added sourcing. 2) About the "promotional" hooks, there are several there. If indeed they are "promotional", I believe the third one (ALT2) is the least "promotional". Perhaps something along the lines of (Moran Zer Katzenstein is an Israeli women's rights activist who stands behind "The Handmaid's Protest Marches" which became a symbol of the ongoing
judicial reform protests held across
Israel?) would be more suitable. --
Omer Toledano (
talk) 03:32, 1 September 2023 (UTC)
Pinging
AirshipJungleman29, to see whether the issues raised have been addressed to their satisfaction.
BlueMoonset (
talk) 09:12, 1 September 2023 (UTC)
I agree with
AirshipJungleman29 that the hooks are overly promotional, and have struck them accordingly. I also don't love the proposed alternative, so let's try and give it one more shot and then decide what to do.
theleekycauldron (
talk • she/her) 07:16, 11 September 2023 (UTC)
@
BlueMoonset: I've added more hooks 4, 5, 6 for your consideration. What do you think? --
Omer Toledano (
talk) 02:53, 13 September 2023 (UTC)