The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as
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Eligible, neutral, sourced inline, no copyvio, valid image licenses (including fair use rationale for the single cover), no QPQ required etc.
Technically the hook fact must be sourced inline in the article at the end of the sentence, whereas it's currently at the end of the paragraph. All that's required is repeating the same inline citation at the end of the sentence.
In my opinion, the prose is on the wordy side. One example: "He then went to a recording studio in Paris with Daft Punk, where they presented him with the draft instrumental". Could the same information be conveyed by: "At a Paris recording studio, Daft Punk presented him with the draft instrumental."? Another, before: Wolfson criticized that there was "probably not one original idea" in the song, but further stated that it did not matter due to its "spectacular" execution. After: Wolfson said the lack of originality in the song was outweighed by its "spectacular" execution.
The wording is largely good enough for DYK, although I'd still like the examples above to be improved. I think we'll be good to go when this and the hook inline citation are addressed. Overall it's clear a lot of work has gone into this article and it's in a good state. โ
Bilorv (talk) 22:00, 6 April 2024 (UTC)
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Good to goโthanks for the very speedy turnaround! Some good improvements on the wordiness; when you get the chance it might be worth a whole re-read from top to bottom to see what else can be shortened. โ
Bilorv (talk) 22:23, 6 April 2024 (UTC)