Issues must be fixed to pass. Suggestions are merely suggestions.Passing
Issues
In the lead, "Originally, he was not meant to appear in Final Fantasy VII at all. " implies he was a created character but wasn't set in appear on that game. Reword
Fixed
First paragraph in creation/conception. If its the same source, source first sentence, than last sentence.
Fixed
"finding it more immature than they expected, despite him being younger than in previous titles." Aside from the double space, the comma implies that the second sentence is arguing against the reviewer's comment.
Fixed
Suggestions
"PALGN described Zack as an unfamiliar character in the series since his only appearances were in backstories". Uh, called instead of described?
Fixed
"When Ayaka finished the song "Why" for Crisis Core, she mentioned that she wanted to deliver it alongside Zack's fate "to the hearts of many people." Sounds more like it belongs in the Crisis Core or album article than character article.
Fixed
GamesRadar's AJ Glasser review at the end of Reception. Shouldn't this be in the previous paragraph? It looks like the paragraph before is where all the positive reception is.
Fixed
Ok, I fixed the article issues you have raised, thank you for reviewing it! I think it looks better, if you have any other issues, let me know!
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