Like we talked about previously, you could probably remove the exact dates of the actors and actresses that played Vincent/Valerie, and just keep the years instead
"unaware that the role would be expanded into the character of Vincent. " --> "unaware that the role would be expanded into the character of Vincent Clarkson."
"He cited the role as inspiring future soap operas to address LGBT issues.[4]" --> "He cited the role as inspiration for future soap operas to address LGBT issues.[4]"
"A few episodes later, Vincent emerges from the ocean and goes to Valerie's house to attack her off-screen for exposing his secrets." So again, this just reveals that he/she has dissociative identity disorder?
On the show, Vincent views Valerie as a separate person and same goes for the other way around. The other characters, especially doctor Eve Russell, recognizes they are in fact the same person and there is something seriously medically/psychologically wrong with him. However, no one on the show diagnoses him beyond being crazy so I am hesitant to say with certainty he has a specific mental disorder when it is never confirmed on the show.
Aoba47 (
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16:31, 18 June 2016 (UTC)reply
Impact and reception
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"Throughout his run on Passions, the character received mixed feedback from critics." --> "Throughout his run on Passions, he received mixed feedback from critics."
Just a bunch of quick fixes! Great work as usual. On hold for seven days and contact me here (@PING me) with any questions. Thanks! Let me know if there's anything else you'd like me to review! Cheers,
Carbrera (
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13:13, 18 June 2016 (UTC).reply