The text of the entry was: Did you know ...that although the 1996 Tropical Storm Arthur made landfall in
North Carolina, total damage amounted to only $1 million?
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Along with possible corrections to the Andrew (1992) rainfall graphic, I'll look into creating rainfall graphics for Arthur tomorrow night. It was an odd oversight.
Thegreatdr (
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20:15, 23 November 2011 (UTC)reply
The graphics have been produced and are in the usual spot. Considering the format of the page, I wasn't sure if you wanted one of them included.
Thegreatdr (
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06:02, 25 November 2011 (UTC)reply
Arthur originated from an area of increased convection Link convection to
atmospheric convection, as not all readers will know what it is. Arthur originated from an area of increased
atmospheric convection
I'm a bit concerned about the usage of "became", as the system is still, well, a system; "designated" or similar words would be better.
Tropical Storm Arthur while just offshore of the
Southeastern United States Two questions — why have the "of" (it tightens the prose if it's removed) and why is "southeastern" capitalized? Tropical Storm Arthur while just offshore the
southeastern United States
Later that day, Arthur peaked as a 45 mph (75 km/h) Clarify that it was a tropical storm at that point; it sounds awkward as it currently is. Later that day, Arthur peaked as a 45 mph (75 km/h) tropical storm
weakened slightly before making landfall As with the above, link landfall to
landfall (meteorology), as not everyone knows what "landfall" means. weakened slightly before making
landfall
early on the following day Tighten the prose a bit by removing "on". early the following day
On June 16, 1996 satellite imagery A comma is needed right after "1996". On June 16, 1996, satellite imagery
On June 17, the convection increased in organization at low-levels A hyphen isn't needed here; it's only needed when you use "level" — in the plural form, it's fine. On June 17, the convection increased in organization at low levels
organized sufficiently to be designated as a tropical depression, the first of the season → organized sufficiently to be designated as a tropical depression, making it the first of the season
Initially, the depression tracked north-northwest under the steering currents of the low-level flow around the western periphery of the Atlantic subtropical ridge There's a lot of jargon here; a few links wouldn't be harmful.
cold low Add a link; they're referring to a cold-core low. cold-core low
The tropical storm weakened to a tropical depression about 100 mi (160 km) northeast of
Cape Hatteras. The depression accelerated towards the northeast when westerly steering currents increased. These sentences could be merged. The tropical storm weakened to a tropical depression about 100 mi (160 km) northeast of
Cape Hatteras, and accelerated towards the northeast when westerly steering currents increased.
though because it fell gradually, no significant flooding was reported[6] Refs should come after punctuation. Try to squeeze a comma in there, so you can put ref #6 after it.
In addition, a C-Man station located about 34.5 mi (55.5 km) — what's a C-Man station?
totaling to only $1 million (1996 USD). Remove the "to" for the tightening of the prose. totaling only $1 million (1996 USD).