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Reviewer: Mike Christie ( talk · contribs) 00:37, 5 February 2018 (UTC)
I'll review this. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 00:37, 5 February 2018 (UTC)
The term transgender refers to a diverse population: "diverse" seems out of place in a definitional sentence like this.
These statistics reveal that more transmasculine people participate in the sex industry more than previously expected: you have "more" twice, but why "expected"? I think this refers to the rest of the sentence, in which case I'd cut "especially", since that's the only reason given.
Transgender sex workers worldwide are at higher risk of contracting HIV and other STIs as well: This seems to be supported just be one Indonesian study, which isn't enough to make such a broad statement.
I'm going to pause the review here to wait for a response on the question of how global the coverage is supposed to be. Generally the prose seems quite clean, and the sources are high quality. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 04:13, 5 February 2018 (UTC)
Hi Mike Christie, yes I am planning to work on it! Sorry for the delays in getting back to you, I've been out of town the past few days and haven't had a chance to make the edits yet. Brookeenglish ( talk) 22:28, 12 February 2018 (UTC)
Brooke, are you still planning to work on this article? If you're busy, it might be best to work on it away from the GA process, without a deadline. I'd be happy to give you feedback on the article prior to another nomination. I'll wait another week; if I don't hear from you I'll fail the article then. Mike Christie ( talk - contribs - library) 01:25, 20 February 2018 (UTC)