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Argento Surfer (
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13:06, 11 April 2018 (UTC)reply
Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
Lead
At the end of the first paragraph, greater good is in quotation marks. If this line comes from dialogue in the show, it should be attributed. If it's a third party interpretation, it needs a source and inline attribution. This aspect of their relationship isn't noted on Gabrielle's character article. Alternatively, this part of the sentence could just be removed. I think it's enough to say she's accompanied by her friend without specifying her friend's precise role.
"Xena's childhood home is haunted and that the demon Mephistopheles is responsible for the hauntings" - is there a way to avoid the awkward repetition of haunt? Maybe "Xena's childhood home is haunted by the demon Mephistopheles, who is responsible for the town's current state."?
"critics who praised its horror elements and dark tone and multiple scenes involving Gabrielle's demonic encounters, and Eve being confronted" - lots of ands here. The first two should be commas.
The Mephistopheles image should have some
WP:ALTTEXT describing what is shown in the picture. I suggest something like "An 1828 lithograph by Eugène Delacroix showing Mephistopheles flying over Wittenberg."
I placed the alt text you wrote. However, I was wondering, the infobox doesn't have any alt text but the information provided there is more or less informative on the image itself. Do you think I should add alt text there as well?
PanagiotisZois (
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16:22, 12 April 2018 (UTC)reply