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Reviewer: Vami IV ( talk · contribs) 20:24, 16 August 2018 (UTC)
I am not a member of the LGBT community or familiar with the San Francisco area. I am reviewing this article because it's been in the GAR backlog for the better part of a year (nominated last November, as of time of writing).
For replying to Reviewer comment, please use Done, Fixed, Added, Not done, Doing..., or Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow after this section and my first comment (Referencing). – Vami _IV† 20:24, 16 August 2018 (UTC)
Any outstanding problems I've had with the referencing of this article, I have already taken care of (redundant instances of citation [3].) The two uses of full-form syntax for a single book bothers me, but it happens literally only twice, so I will make no further mention of it.
This section feels incomplete, to put it bluntly. I feel I've been given a TL;DR version rather than a full, comprehensive history (examples: "Helmut Hanken era" and "Carl Hanken era" don't really explain what troubles they were facing). I am to understand that this is because of a dirth of reliable references, which I completely understand. The section feels mostly complete, and does have specificity in some places, such as Mr. Whitmore's attempted murder of Carl Franken. There is also no transitional prose between sections, except the end of "Helmut Hanken era."
With a new executor in control, Helmut Hanken's estate immediately sold the club to Carl Hanken.Uncited.
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