I would put a comma before `who wished to properly show'.
Revised
Couldn't the sentences in the last paragraph of the incipit be tied together? That "As a result," for example, I don't like.
Revised
I would simplify some parts of the plot.
Done
Is the mention of the battle with Nina necessary? Maybe she is a key character, but it seems to me a very superfluous aside like that in Siynopsis.
Removed
I would avoid the repetition of 'games' in Production.
Done
I would put a comma before 'while the series' director'.
Done
Harada's comment seems superfluous to me. The fact that he is the game designer on the other hand is encyclopaedic.
Removed the apology thing if taht's what the superflous
The comments of the two voice actors also seem very vague and unencyclopaedic to me. I would remove them.
Removed
"with Comic Book Resources". Doesn't seem related to 'mixed' to me. I would therefore split the period into two sentences; one saying the reception was mixed, and another separate sentence presenting CBR and other sources.