The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Tana Tidung Regency is the smallest regency by land area in
North Kalimantan and has the province's lowest poverty rate?
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PCN02WPS I have addressed all the problems you mentioned. I merged politics and local government subsection since there is not much unique to the regency in terms of government structure, but I still think it is important to briefly explain how regencies in Indonesia works to the reader.
The lead is fine, if not a little short; perhaps a bit from the "history" section could be placed there before "created in 2007" as a bit of context.
The "HDI" parameter in the infobox has a bit with yellow text that is not readable, which violates
MOS:CONTRAST; yellow is also on the list of colors that are not acceptable against a white background as listed at
MOS:ONWHITE
Even though it's linked in the infobox, I think
Tideng Pale could be linked in the lead as well.
History
Etymology
"The name, Tidung, comes from the word..." → I don't think the commas before and after "Tidung" are necessary.
"The town's name, Tideng Pale..." → I'd change to reflect that this is not the only town, as the current wording is a bit ambiguous.
The meaning of the word tideng is given in the previous sentence, and it is given in lowercase at first and uppercase at the second mention, which should probably be consistent.
Early history
First sentence should probably be sourced, and "it is believed" sounds a bit vague; perhaps specify whether this is a broad consensus or a niche theory, or something in between.
"The spread of Islam in Indonesia..." →
Islam in Indonesia could be linked here.
"Its first king is thought..." → specify to what extent this is thought (same as above), and "its king" is a bit ambiguous as it is unclear which kingdom (Tidung or Berayu) it refers to.
"The last King of Tidung..." → "King" is capitalized here but is lowercase earlier in the paragraph - I'd be consistent with capitalization here.
A brief explanation of what Afdeeling Tidoengschelanden is would be helpful as some readers (myself included) are unfamiliar with this term.
Post-independence
"The creation of a Tidung-dominated regency was realized in 2007 based on Law Number 34 of 2007" → This sounds slightly redundant, I'd reword to eliminate one of the two bolded parts (emphasis is mine).
Geography
"has an area" → This isn't super crucial, but I think it'd be helpful to specify whether you're referring to land area or total area here.
"between 0-40% grade" → I'd change the hyphen (-) to an endash (–).
"most of its flat land with a slope of less than eight percent is along the coast" → add bolded word (emphasis is mine). I'd also think about converting "eight" to a numeral "8" even though it's less than ten, since the "0" and "40" in the prior sentence are given as numerals.
Give the range in temperature as 21–25 rather than 25/21; the latter is not immediately recognizable as a range.
"by splitting them off from the Sesayap and the Sesayap Hilir Districts respectively" → bolded word should be added.
The local government subsection is a bit generic - it gives some broad information about regencies but doesn't give any specific information about the local government of the Tana Tidung Regency in specific.
I think the table in the "politics" subsection could be converted to prose at the end of the existing paragraph.
Economy
I would word the agricultural output similarly to the livestock output; worded as "74.5 tons of chili" as opposed to "chili with 74.5 tons".
Warung doesn't look like it needs to be italicized and put in quotation marks; I think the quotes are unnecessary after taking a look at the target article.
"...which handle most transactions." → Most transactions in the country are handled by the previously mentioned 342 warungs, or those 342 handle a majority of transactions among all warungs in the country?
"-0.74%" → A minus sign (−) should be used, rather than a hyphen (-).
Demographics
Is "regions" being used as a specific term or a general term? Should "regencies" be used here instead?
What constitutes being "economically active"? This term doesn't mean as much if the reader doesn't know what exactly it means.
"Tana Tidung is the least populated regency in the entire country, and consists of a large island in the northeast of the regency" → This doesn't quite make sense - the regency consists of a large island in the northeast of the regency?
This may be a mistake with my math but I think the sex ratio would be 1.15 if there were 115 males for every 100 females.
I'd move Hinduism behind Buddhism so you can keep the religions in order of percentage.
Infrastructure
Since puskesmas is plural, I'd change the translation "community health clinic" to the plural "...clinics".
There are a few instances of
weasel words, particularly the phrase "it is believed that..." or the like. I have tagged the two instances I found with {{By whom}} in hopes that they can be clarified.
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline.
2b.
reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
There are a few paragraphs, namely in the
early history section, that go quite a ways without a citation. In that particular section, the first paragraph goes from "Another kingdom, Berayu..." to "...the help of the Dutch in 1916" with just two citations after the latter sentence. Is all of that information covered by those two references?
Nomination remains on hold pending the comments in the table above.
Did you know nomination
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Overall: Thank you,
Nyanardsan for a thorough and careful article on a region of Indonesia. It was promoted to GA on 10 January 2021. The hook has 129 characters and is repeated in the article; both cases are cited, and both cases are offline, therefore taken AGF. Just one issue: QPQ pending. When that is done, this nom should be good to go.
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