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Reviewer: DreamRimmer ( talk · contribs) 13:01, 27 July 2023 (UTC)
After carefully reading the page, I must say that, at first glance, I didn't notice any apparent mistakes. The article appears to be well-written and comprehensive, demonstrating a high level of attention to detail and accuracy. I will continue my review to ensure a thorough assessment, but so far, it seems to meet the criteria for a Good article.
𝙳𝚛𝚎𝚊𝚖𝚁𝚒𝚖𝚖𝚎𝚛
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15:48, 27 July 2023 (UTC)
In the sentence, The council was composed of some elected members, and some who were nominated by the Chogyal., there is a lack of parallel structure. The first part of the sentence uses the phrase "some elected members," but the second part introduces a relative clause "who were nominated by the Chogyal." To maintain consistency and parallelism, both parts of the sentence should use the same structure. Replace it with The council was composed of some elected members and some nominated by the Chogyal.
In the third sentence. The phrase This too was presided over by the Dewan of Sikkim lacks clear subject-verb agreement. The correct form should be These too were presided over by the Dewan of Sikkim
to match the plural subject "They" in the previous sentence.
In the third sentence of the first paragraph: in the phrase of the kingdom. The correct preposition to use in this context is in the kingdom
instead of of the kingdom.
in the kingdom's administration- MPGuy2824 ( talk) 04:24, 28 July 2023 (UTC)
In the second paragraph:
In the 1953 election, all the Nepali-reserved seats were won by the Sikkim National Party, while the BL-reserved seats were won by the Sikkim State Congress.('whie,' should be 'while)
Due to requests from the monastery associations and other groups, the number of electable seats on the Council was increased by two: one for the Sangha, to be voted on by the monks, and one seat that wasn't reserved for any particular group.(or simply replace comma with :}}
In the 1958 elections, the Sikkim State Congress won an additional seat, while the unreserved seat was won by an Independent.
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All citations are from reliable sources. no issues
In the First paragraph
which the Chogyal signed under pressure from India.(or simply remove the comma after the Chogyal)
The Indian Lok Sabha then voted in favour of making Sikkim an 'associate' state, with the Rajya Sabha voting for an amendment on 8 September, giving it a status equal to that of other states, and absorbing it in the Indian Union.is too lengthy and complex. It would be better to break it down into shorter, more concise sentences.
On 8 September, the Chogyal called for a free and fair referendum.lacks context. It would be more informative to include why the Chogyal called for the referendum.
In the Second paragraph
...putting the king under house arrestwithout the hyphen. When using the term "house arrest," it is typically written as two separate words.
...the referendum took place.
...resulting in more than 97% of the votes for abolishing the monarchy"for" should be replaced with "in favor of" to indicate the votes' support for the action.
...which transformed Sikkim from an Indian protectorate to a new state within the Indian union.This sentence is correct, but you can improve it stylistically by adding a comma after "protectorate" to make the meaning clearer.
In the Last paragraph
Following this, B. B. Lal took charge as Governor of the state on 16th May.
In the same sentence: add "the" before "Governor." When referring to a specific position, like "Governor," we generally use the definite article "the" to specify which Governor is being mentioned. Additionally, there should not be a comma before "on 16th May." Commas are not necessary when specifying a specific date.
It appears to be good, however you can remove the unused parameters if you want.
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No issues, checked. I think you should remove "Bombay Legislative Assembly" (okay if not)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
I'll post more comments tomorrow. 𝙳𝚛𝚎𝚊𝚖𝚁𝚒𝚖𝚖𝚎𝚛 𝚍𝚒𝚜𝚌𝚞𝚜𝚜 17:37, 27 July 2023 (UTC)
The result was: promoted by
Cielquiparle (
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12:07, 2 September 2023 (UTC)
Created by MPGuy2824 ( talk). Self-nominated at 05:01, 30 July 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/State Council (Sikkim); consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.
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Overall: Hook is interesting and sourced, though I would prefer the "Buddhist monks and nuns" in the hook to be linked to the Buddhist monasticism article. Furthermore, the article was recently promoted to Good Article-status so there are essentially no issues whatsoever. Lefcentreright Discuss 13:59, 31 July 2023 (UTC)