This article is in decent shape, but it needs more work before it becomes a Good Article.
Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
In the Gameplay section, you might want to add just a bit in what the first-shooter person does in Coruscant. Same section, "Gameplay leans towards ranged combat, although some enemies have melee attacks such as punching, biting, and axes", do the enemies attack the jedis with axes? If so, that's a stupid question from me, also because I needed to be sure. If not, you might want to explain that. In the Plot, this sentence ---> "Ors' cover was eventually blown and she was taken prisoner", reads very odd, might need to be re-written.
In the Plot, it would be best if "Rebel Alliance" is linked once, per
here. In the Reaction section, "series" is not supposed to italicized in the link. In the Critical reception section, italicize "The Seattle Times", per
here.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
In Reference 19, "The Seattle Times" should be in the work format, instead of the publisher.
Check.
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
"do the enemies attack the jedis with axes? If so, that's a stupid question from me, also because I needed to be sure. If not, you might want to explain that." - ...what? I'm having trouble understanding that. There are no "jedis" in Dark Forces. And it seems to me that "Everyday life" is the wrong category for a video game...
Some guy (
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08:01, 24 January 2009 (UTC)reply
Regardless of that, it seems to me that a "good article" assessment isn't worth very much if it is assessed by someone who can barely form coherent sentences. I think it's a good article but I'd almost want it reassessed just for the principle of it.
Some guy (
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I think that's unnecessarily harsh. I have
WP:GAN watchlisted because I've done a couple of reviews myself, ThinkBlue has done over 200 and I've never seen any question over the quality of her reviews. In my opinion this one is no different. If this is over the "Jedis" → "Kyle" thing then I think you're overreacting. --
Bill(
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contribs)03:16, 26 January 2009 (UTC)reply
I'm sorry, that was harsh. Some of her language was just awkward for me to read but now I realize it's just because she's not familiar with a lot of the subject matter and I'm so used to it I didn't think about it. I apologize.
Some guy (
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07:09, 26 January 2009 (UTC)reply