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Placed on hold for now. I will get to the spotcheck later today. Note this is my first time reviewing a video game-related article, so please bear with me! ツLunaEatsTuna(
💬)—02:26, 25 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Spotcheck done! Please ping me once you have addressed my concerns so that I will know when to reevaluate. Feel free to continue asking me questions about anything you are unsure of. Thanks, ツLunaEatsTuna(
💬)—00:25, 26 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Nice work! Everything looks good to go. I am now pleased to pass this article for GA status per the changes you implemented. Congrats on your first GA! ツLunaEatsTuna(
💬)—17:37, 27 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Copyvio check
Earwig Copyvio Detector says good to go. Quotations are reasonable and used in-line with
WP:COPYQUOTE.
Files
All images used are relevant, appropriate and copyright-free:
File:Splatoon.3.jpg: valid non-free use rationale;
File:Splatoon 3 Turf War.jpg: valid non-free use rationale;
File:Splatoon 3 Salmon Run.jpg: valid non-free use rationale.
Prose
Lead
"all featuring ink-based combat." – is a pretty confusing sentence. Maybe something like "all featuring combat themed around ink." would be more informative.
The first sentence of the second paragraph reads awkwardly. I would split "and received generally favorable reviews from critics." into its own sentence beginning with it.
"Inklings and Octolings have the ability to morph into a squid or octopus form respectively. This form is referred to as the "swim form", and can be" – I would combine the first sentence with "and can be" and turn the swim form line into its own sentence so that the abilities purpose is explained first. Seems more relevant this way.
Not sure I would do this, however that would turn "This form is referred to as the the 'swim form'" into an extremely short sentence. Thoughts? ―
Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#654504:01, 25 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Personally I think this looks fine. Short sentences like this to describe what something is called are not uncommon in GAs, but it is optional so I'll trust your judgement here.
The sentence starting "Matches last three minutes, and whichever" is missing a citation.
Removed, the citation is technically the game, however the length of time matches last isn't really all that relevant. If it is relevant I'll try and find a ref. ―
Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#654504:10, 25 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Agreed, not particularly relevant.
"a higher percentage of the field" – recommend "the largest portion of the field".
"The main goal is to collect Golden Eggs, obtained by splatting special enemies known as "Boss Salmonids", and carry them to a basket." – this sentence is more fitting earlier into the paragraph.
Not sure if Wikipedia has a policy page on this, but I have never seen this used in any GAs or FAs before. It is standard practice not to in all styles of English—fictional place names are treated the same as real-life place names, in that they are proper nouns. Just like the names of fictional characters, no further details (like italics etc.) are required for them; just capitalisations. Generally, only the works themselves (video games, books, films etc.) may have quotation marks in software that does not support italics.
"flying lawnmower-like-device" – rephrase; IMO its resemblance to a lawnmower is not really noteworthy.
Done, changed to "cutting device" since it's not actually the device that flies but Captain 3 (Agent 3 from Splatoon 1). Seems to be some sort of unique "special" they use but that's not clear enough nor relevant enough to include. ―
Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#654516:24, 27 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Done, moved some things around and removed "powered by a new rendition of 'Calamari Inkantation'" as that's not really relevant. ―
Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#654516:29, 27 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Development
SRD and Bandai Namco Studios Singapore & Malaysia are not mentioned anywhere.
"the single-player story mode, the multiplayer lobby, alongside weapons, and multiplayer maps." – should be either "the single-player story mode and the multiplayer lobby, alongside weapons and multiplayer maps." or "the single-player story mode, multiplayer lobby, weapons, and multiplayer maps."
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LunaEatsTuna: Ok I looked at the credits and both SRD and Bandai Namco Studios Singapore & Malaysia are credited there. Should I use some sort of citation template to show this or no? ―
Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#654500:39, 26 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Oh, as long as they are in the credits it should be fine uncited. My main concern came from the fact that you cited Nintendo but not the others.
Refs
Passes spotcheck on refs 5, 8, 11, 22, 34, 50, 65 and 75. Looking at other video game GAs, § Gameplay and § Plot generally do not require citations so those sections are good to go.
The way the publication names are wikilinked is inconsistent. I would recommend wikilinking their first mentions only or wikilinking all mentions.
This and a few other things in here are most likely due to the automatic citation tool being weird. I'll still fix them though. ―
Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#654516:25, 25 February 2023 (UTC)reply
No, it should be fine! Actually, I'll fix these issues myself after this passes.
Is ref 2's name really Wood Wood?
Fixed No clue how that happened.
Given how its the only one, I would remove ref 32's ISSN.
That's because it's the only magazine being cited because Wired is a magazine. Do you still want me to remove it even with this? ―
Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#654516:31, 25 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Did you add a citation in the interim? Because 60 (probably at that time 59), 75 (probably at that time 74), and 76 (probably at that time 75) are presently missing the publication date.
Mr rnddude (
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03:50, 26 February 2023 (UTC)reply
"Many apologies, that was an error on my part." I'm sorry but what do you mean an error on your part? LunaEatsTuna has been reviewing this and you only just came in. ―
Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#654503:52, 26 February 2023 (UTC)reply
I mean, you are correct I did add a citation after this. However I add the publication date to 75. I'll run citationbot to see if it can fix that. ―
Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#654503:54, 26 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Some citations for Nintendo Life say Hookshot Media whilst others omit it.
Removed It's unclear whether or not Hookshot Media is the copyright holder or publisher since the Nintendo Life website says they just own the copyright, while Hookshot's website says they're the publisher. ―
Blaze WolfTalkBlaze Wolf#654514:14, 27 February 2023 (UTC)reply
Other
Short desc, infobox, section formatting, External links, navs, cats and other templates good to go.
Recommend adding
WP:ALT text to the images if you can.
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