Good work Pyrrhus, the article is well written and comprehensive, in many ways the perfect GA song article. I have a small number of minor concerns so I'll put the article on hold for now until they're dealt with.
Cavie78 (
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10:13, 28 April 2010 (UTC)reply
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"In the production of "Speechless", Jackson collaborated with musicians such as Jeremy Lubbock..." I think this could be worded better - I was unsure what you meant on first read through. Would suggest changing to something like "Jackson collaborated with musicians including Jeremy Lubbock ... during the production of "Speechless"."
"Nikolas Markantonatos of The Daily Collegian in Massachusetts expressed that one could "nearly feel Jackson's energy bursting through the seams..." Expressed is the wrong word, change to "stated"? "suggested"?
In my opinion it would be good to include the fact that the music clip features the track's chorus in the description so that users know what they're listening to.