"Desperate Housewives focuses on the lives of several residents..." Several?
"...who tells him that he will only be forgiven if he turns himself in;..." Insert bolded
"The episode is only one of two season premieres Cherry did not write himself, as he took on a reduced production role for the eighth season in order to develop a new series while Daily was given more creative authority.[14]" Insert bolded?
The last two sentences in the ratings paragraph are a little confusing. Are you talking about Pan Am or Desperate Housewives?
"The episode received mixed to positive critical reviews." -> "Secrets That I Never Want to Know" received mixed to positive critical reviews.
"generally positive" or "mixed to positive" reviews?
"...From the funny car theft scene to the ... housewives swim only scene, ..." I know this is a partial quote, but what does the bolded mean? Would it be more clear with the full quote?
"TV Fanatic's Christina Tran gave the episode a positive review, giving it 4 out of 5 stars.[25] " giving -> handing out?
"She also appreciated the writers' decision not to prolong Tom..." She -> Tran
Almost flawless referencing. Only issue: Ref 6: add date (7/18/2008)
Great, great article. But then again, your articles are always well written and sourced. Only minor issues above, and then I'll be happy to pass this one. Ruby2010/201306:54, 2 December 2011 (UTC)reply