So many sentences begin with "Volk ..." which gets to be repetitive. Consider adding some "He ..."s or rearranging sentences.
"Volk began working as a manufacturer's representative while still playing football. He continued in that business after retiring from football." Repetition of "football"
Thanks for the review! I've partially done this, will finish in the next couple days once I find time to take a look at the new source.
Wizardman02:26, 17 June 2014 (UTC)reply
Finished the rest. Looked over the reference, and it's essentially the same information as the Ravens 'where are they now' link. Useful for confirming what's in the article, but wasn't able to add anything new.
Wizardman12:42, 21 June 2014 (UTC)reply