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""We Don't Go to Ravenholm."" → ""We Don't Go to Ravenholm"." per
MOS:LQ
Done
Taking place in an Eastern European mining town that was destroyed by the bombardment of ravenous alien headcrabs. Sentence fragment
Done - That error was added by a subsequent editor, but I rephrased the lede so it is hopefully more clear.
Level content
Very pedantic: the fact that this is the sixth chapter of Half-Life 2 needs to be mentioned in this section
Done
"infamous line" comes across as POV
Done - Scare quotes added
the music shifts to horror More specificity is needed here; the score for Halloween is not the same as for Scream etc.
Done
"poison headcrabs" → "poisonous headcrabs"
Done
The shift from lowercase/scare quoted "fast zombies" to capitalized Fast Zombies seems inconsistent
Done
"some zombies" → "several zombies"
Done
Plot
The Resistance should be linked in the "Level content" section and there should be a consistent capitalization of "The"
Done (Actually just unlinked, because the link went nowhere)
Ravenholm was a small mining town that consisted mostly of shabby wooden houses Very close paraphrasing with source
Done
While use of such weapons was relatively rare elsewhere in the game's world, it is possible that the Combine saw it as retribution for resisting them for so long. I'm not sure what this means
Done
Development
Check the wikilink on "trap", which currently links to our article on animal trapping
Done
Understanding the suggestion to use physics objects as weapons relied on shared knowledge of zombie-based horror instilled by fiction such as The Zombie Survival Guide. Another confusing sentence
Done
"It is a popular consensus" → "It is generally believed by fans and writers"
Done
Cancelled projects
"It was eventually cancelled" → "This project was eventually cancelled"
Done
"Marc Laidlaw"
Done
Reception
Paragraphs should have topic sentences to explain why they're broken up the way that they are