"statistic professor" - I only see "academic in the cited source, not the field of study. The Face source can be used for this.
"She has one older brother, who works as an audio engineer." - not verified by cited source. The Face source can be used for this.
"When she was five years old" - not verified by cited source. The Face source can be used for this.
Was hesitant to put The Face source at the end of each of these per
WP:REPCITE. Obviously not a policy, but it still seems redundant to keep repeating the same citation as opposed to just leaving it at the end of the final sentence that supports all of those things.
benǝʇᴉɯ14:44, 1 June 2022 (UTC)reply
There is an argument that the current version passes
WP:BLPSOURCES as the info isn't likely to be challenged, but I think it's preferable to have the citations directly adjacent to the material. If this section is expanded in future, the links between The Face citation and the supported material might become more distant. To avoid it looking too ugly on the page, you could use
WP:CITEBUNDLE.
BennyOnTheLoose (
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15:57, 1 June 2022 (UTC)reply
Career
Second paragraph has two sentences starting withe "Her" followed by two sentences starting with "She". I suggest copyediting this.
"topline writing" - I didn't know what this meant; maybe add an explanation in text or in a footnote to explain it?
Normally I would just wikilink "topline writing", but it has no article on here. I can include a footnote, since I also was unaware of what topline writing was prior to seeing her discuss it.benǝʇᴉɯ14:44, 1 June 2022 (UTC)reply
""a form of D'n'B that's acceptable to listen to at home" - add the source directly after this quote; also make it clear which source(s) the shorter quotes come from.
Seem appropriate, and no issues found with verification except as mentioned above. There are a couple of places where references can be ordered numerically, e.g. "[9][7]", "[40][1][46]"
The link to the official site gives me a dodgy pop-up about winning phones. Is this still the right url?
I think the dodgy pop-up is there on purpose as a joke. If I had to guess, it's a part of the early 2000s gimmick. Also, if you noticed, clicking "OK" doesn't actually do anything, and it says "before we give it away to someone else more grateful."
benǝʇᴉɯ14:44, 1 June 2022 (UTC)reply
There are some duplicated links, i.e. UK Singles Chart, Paramore, Green Day, dance/dance music. I think all of these can be delinked after the first instance in the body, per
MOS:DUPLINK.
Thanks for your work on the article,
Benmite. I've read the discussion on the talk page (and the subject's views on privacy in sources), and I am satisfied that the absence of further personal details in the article is appropriate per
WP:BLPPRIVACY. I amended year of birth in the article per The Guardian source, which hopefully you're happy with, given that it had been changed after your earlier edits. I think the article only needs tweaks to meet GA standards, but I'll have another look after reviewing your responses. Regards,
BennyOnTheLoose (
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11:44, 1 June 2022 (UTC)reply