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Reviewer:
K. Peake (
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13:53, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
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Will take this on; first review for you in a while! --
K. Peake
13:53, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
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Infobox and lead
Replace hlist with bullet points per
Template:Infobox album
"debut studio album of" → "debut studio album by"
Independent label introduction is not needed here when you provide this in the body
"Owls is an" → "The album is an"
"
Pavement and
Captain Beefheart ." → "
Pavement , and
Captain Beefheart ."
Start a new para at the critical reception part
"noted its influences from the members' other bands while some others" → "noted influence from the members' other bands, while others"
Add a sentence after critical reception mentioning the album being ranked as one of the best emo albums by Rolling Stone
"The album was promoted" → "It was promoted"
Background and production
Turns out he has a page at
Victor Villarreal ; swapped the link to that instead.
Yeepsi (
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18:20, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
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Pipe Sam Zurick to
Make Believe (band)
"In September that year," → "In September 2000,"
"with Mike Kinsella and" should this be "with the Kinsellas" per the source?
I thought Mike Kinsella wasn't a member of Joan of Arc until later on (when he actually was at the time of this album, I'm mistaken).
Yeepsi (
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18:20, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
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[1] should solely be at the end of the last sentence
"met with a" → "was met with a"
[1] does not mention those sources calling it unlistenable
"and
The Chicago Tribune would" → "and the
Chicago Tribune would"
"in Japan before" → "in Japan, before"
Introduction of "the band's debut album" is not needed here when it is provided in the lead
Pipe mastered to
Mastering (audio)
Composition
Had to remove this since I removed the Portland Mercury ref.
Yeepsi (
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18:20, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
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"bounced between plucked single-notes" → "went between plucked notes" because it does not say anywhere that they are single
Same as above.
Yeepsi (
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18:20, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
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"is similar to his" → "was described as similar to his"
"and anchor Tim Kinsella's" → "and accompany Tim's" per MOS:SAMESURNAME
"The first tracks" → "The first two tracks"
"include percussion such as bongos and tambourine." → "include bongos and tambourine." since these are the only instruments sourced
"Kinsella sings about heredity and marriage while" → "Tim Kinsella sings about heredity and marriage, while"
Add the year of "Who Goes Nazi?"
"a
math rock song with" → "a
math rock song, with"
"the record's musical forms;" → "the musical forms of Owls ;"
"vocal melodies and Kinsella's" → "vocal melodies, and Kinsella's"
"refer to Tim and Mike Kinsella's cousin" → "refer to Tim and Mike's cousin" per us already knowing they have the same surname
Release and reception
Promotion and touring
Retitle to Promotion, as touring is a form of this
"was announced in" → "became public in"
Remove independent label introduction and wikilink for Jade Tree
Wikilink
pre-order
"July 31 the same year." → "July 31 of the same year."
"the group embarked" → "the band embarked"
"After the tour was completed," → "After the tour ended,"
Move [8] to after the comma instead since refs should follow punctuation
"in October 2002[22] and disbanded" → "in October 2002[22], before disbanding"
Critical response
Retitle to Reception
"He said Tim Kinsella's" → "He said Kinsella's"
"
Cleveland Scene writer Brian Baker" → "The
Cleveland Scene writer Brian Baker"
"wrote Kinsella was "warbling in" → "wrote Kinsella warbles "in"
Wikilink
CMJ New Music Monthly to itself per
MOS:LINK2SECT
Mention the full name of Stylus Magazine since it is not a publication where magazine is in brackets
"and said the nonsensical lyrics" → "and noted the nonsensical lyrics"
"at times" but with" → "at times", but with"
the A.V. Club → The A.V. Club , as "the" is part of the publication's name
""orphan" list, which" → ""orphan" list for the 2000s, which"
"list of the" → "2016 list of the"
Pipe Vulture to
Vulture.com
Track listing
Personnel
References
The publication is listed at
WP:ALBUM/SOURCE .
Yeepsi (
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18:20, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
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Remove or replace ref 14 since it is a bi-weekly tabloid and does not have many staff members
Are you sure ref 15 is reliable;
the staff seems to be quite low?
They have a large amount of writers listed
here and on
the various print editions (the latter is a little annoying as they're listed on separate pages as opposed to all being on one page).
Yeepsi (
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18:20, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
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Ref 16 needs to work as a citation so clicking on it directs down to the source
Stylus → Stylus Magazine on ref 24
Pipe Vulture to
Vulture.com on ref 28 per MOS:LINK2SECT
Wikilink
CMJ New Music Monthly
External links
Final comments and verdict
@
Kyle Peake : Made the changes.
Yeepsi (
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18:20, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
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@
Yeepsi : ✓ Pass now, only did some very brief copy editing and the sources you provided are acceptable now. --
K. Peake
07:54, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
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