The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that "Oh Love", the first single from
Green Day's album, ¡Uno!, is the third-ever song to make its debut at number one on the
US Rock Songs chart?
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I actually created 2 redirects. This 1 and the other
Oh Love. I planned to expand
Oh Love but this occurred:
[1]. Then due to few fixes, it is tough to move now. I have requested G7 for
Oh Love.I will move as soon as my redirect gets deleted. Thanks! —
TheSpecialUser(
TSU)14:10, 18 July 2012 (UTC)reply
use one kind of date format troughout the article as they are an american band use american style for example 3 December, 2011
Lead
It was released as the first single --> lead single
from February to June 2012 --> from February to June 2012,
It was recorded at Jingletown Studios from February to June 2012 but --> prefer however over but
The song appeared on multiple charts worldwide, whilst also debuting at number one
Background and release
The song was played at a "secret show" performed by the band on October 28, 2011 where the band also performed other songs which are on the track list of ¡Uno!; "Let Yourself Go" and "Carpe Diem". ---> The song was played at a "secret show" performed by the band on October 28, 2011, where the band also performed other songs which are on the track listing of ¡Uno!; "Let Yourself Go" and "Carpe Diem". put Uno in italics.
Erica Futterman of Rolling Stone Magazine praised the performance of the band --> Erica Futterman of Rolling Stone, praised the performance of the band, whilst also writing, "Other new music included the blistering Ramones-tinged 'Let Yourself Go' ('Shut your mouth 'cause you're talking too much and I don't give a fuck anyway'), the driving beat and sing-along chorus of 'Carpe Diem,' and the strut of 'Oh Love'"."
The official confirmation of the song came with the release of the track list of their album ¡Uno! on June 26, 2012 --> track listing
The 16 second video --> 16-second
The song was released on July 16, 2012 through Reprise records.[8] Along with the release of the song, the band uploaded another video to YouTube which had its lyrics and the full song ---> The song was released on July 16, 2012 through Reprise records,[8] along with the release of the song, the band uploaded another video to YouTube which had its lyrics and the full song.
On July 20, 2012, an EP of the song was announced which would be released on August 14, 2012.[9] --> an extended play and change "would" to is set for release on August 14, 2012. its not released yet.
make the section in to 2 paragraphs, not enough info for three
Theme and composition
Musical style of the song is reminiscent of the band's early albums, Nimrod and Dookie. ---> add the years the albums were released so the reader can establish from which time its musical style is reminiscent. suggest using brackets.
It is a "move away" from the band's politically inspired releases like American Idiot and 21st Century Breakdown. Again add years
Bassist, Mike Dirnt describes the musical style of "Oh Love" by stating, "We were just thinking about making a killer power-pop record – dirtier, back to basics. We tapped into our version of Exile on Main Street".[12] Billie Joe Armstrong, the frontman of the band talking about his desire to write a power pop song, stated that, "What I really wanted to do was write real power-pop kind of music that had that old Green Day energy, so the original Green Day sound became '¡Uno!'".[8]
David Fricke of Rolling Stone has compared the song to the genre of The Who's "Quadrophenia" and the singing of Armstrong in the start to that of John Lennon. He also added that "the song is a tight, addicting bundle of pop-hook class and crunchy-punk fundamentals".[13] Sarah Maloy of the Billboard states that the guitar play is simple and the tune is similar to band's early releases. She adds that, "The midtempo, guitar-heavy track is simple, with repetition in both the words and the beat. Easily identifiable as a Green Day single, "Oh Love" looses some of the grit of the group's previous releases, with catchy love song lyrics".[8] --------------> Bassist, Mike Dirnt described the musical style of "Oh Love" by stating, "We were just thinking about making a killer power-pop record – dirtier, back to basics. We tapped into our version of Exile on Main Street".[12] Billie Joe Armstrong, the frontman of the band also talked about his desire to write a power pop song, stating, "What I really wanted to do was write real power-pop kind of music that had that old Green Day energy, so the original Green Day sound became '¡Uno!'".[8] David Fricke of Rolling Stone compared the song to the genre of The Who's "Quadrophenia" and the vocals of Armstrong in the start to that of John Lennon. He also opined that the song is a "tight, addicting bundle of pop-hook class and crunchy-punk fundamentals".[13] Sarah Maloy of the Billboard elaborated that the guitar instrumentation is simple and the tune is similar to band's early releases. Maloy's following quote is not necessary it just repeats what is already written.
move the audio sample from the box to this section and write something about the musical composition, in it which is featured in the audio sample.
Critical reception
change to one paragraph
The song received positive response from a number of critics. ----> remove this only 3 reviews at the moment and 1 is negative
Charts ------> change to 'Chart performance'
"Oh Love" made its debut at number of charts across the world. -----> Upon its release, "Oh Love" made its debut on multiple world charts.
remove position in the entire section number .. is enough
for example at number seventy-six on the issue dated June 14, 2008 per
WP:ORDINAL it would should be 76, please apply elsewhere in this section.
reduce to one paragraph not big enough at least for now
References
Change all date formats to one format, to this one June 12, 2012 as they are an american band for both date and accessdate
As this is GA and not FA publisher are not required although you have to remove all websites from work and replace them with what is placed in publisher and leave publisher opened unless you want to add publisher for example the publisher for Billboard is
Prometheus Global Media and for Rolling Stone
Jann Wenner but once again publisher are not needed to meet GA Criteria
Hope you like it. I finished everything but I've one question; what do I have to do regarding the big paragraph placed by you? I'm confused and don't know what to change. I removed repeating comment but don't know what to do further? Thanks for the review, you are pretty good at it :) TheSpecialUserTSU07:48, 1 August 2012 (UTC)reply
I'm have implemented what I think you mean. Refs look great! in the sections artwork and chart performance the date formats need to be changed to american styling of dates 12 July, 2012,
AdabowtheSecond (
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08:05, 1 August 2012 (UTC)reply
Additionally rewrite the prose in chart performance it needs some more "the" and "on" and link to Rock Songs in the lead, in lead it says positive and in critical recp section it says mixed? Do this its a clear pass. I was wondering if you could close
WMYB before you go on vacay.
AdabowtheSecond (
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08:32, 1 August 2012 (UTC)reply
Replace {{GA nominee}} on the article's talk page with {{
GA|~~~~~|topic=|page=}}.[1] The "page=" parameter should be a number only - no letters. Please include "GA" in your edit summary.
List the article on
Wikipedia:Good articles under the appropriate section.[2] Encourage the successful nominator(s) to review an article themselves.
This shouldn't have been passed. The single hasn't even been out for a month yet. No music video has been released and I'm sure there's a lot more promotion they will be doing for the song. This was nominated way too soon. The lead, additionally, is way too short. Statυs (
talk)20:44, 5 August 2012 (UTC)reply
^ The five tildes supply the date of the review. The topic parameter refers to the
topic abbreviations used on the GA page, but the template automatically converts GAN subtopics into GA topics, so reviewers can simply copy the parameter value from one template to the other. "Page" should be the number of the review subpage (that is, the n in {{Talk:ArticleName/GAn}}).
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