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Given that male and female have different appearance, is it possible for more of the image captions to indicate sex (only with certainty, of course)?
Nurg (
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08:48, 28 June 2024 (UTC)reply
True, thanks for noticing. I’ve included sex in captions and replaced a couple of images so we have a better representation of females and juveniles.
Podzemnik (
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07:44, 30 June 2024 (UTC)reply
Apologies for the delay. Real life and all that… Here is the first part of my review. Overall, the article is quite informative and well-written and most of my comments below are suggestions for minor improvements. I think the only thing that's really missing is a bit more detail about the subspecies. I'll be back later to perform source spotchecks.
Esculenta (
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17:06, 4 July 2024 (UTC)reply
Thank you so much for your review, I really appreciate it! I'm quite busy right now, but I will go through your review and address your suggestions, hopefully next week. Cheers,
Podzemnik (
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08:04, 9 July 2024 (UTC)reply
Lead
some links might be considered to fall under
WP:OVERLINK, like Europe, tongue, flower, parks, gardens, fruit, insect, and eggs. However, linking to
bird egg would be more subject specific and perhaps useful. Other possibly useful links: breeding season, pair bond
maybe tweak wording to remove the repeated use of "noted"
Its "Captain Cook" in the lead, but "James Cook" throughout the article … maybe the lead use should be the full "Captain James Cook"?
"Bellbirds have modified their ninth primaries," if I don't know what a "primary" is, I have to click away from the article to find out what this means, so can the wording be tweaked to "ninth primary flight feathers" or similar?
"The bellbird is regarded as taonga by the Māori," maybe gloss taonga so reader doesn't have to click away to determine meaning
minor regional spelling inconsistencies: utilize/ recognised /symbolises
Taxonomy and nomenclature
image caption: "Illustration of a male (right) and a female bellbirds by J. G. Keulemans, 1888"
"When anchored at Queen Charlotte Sound, Cook's botanist Joseph Banks" I would word this as "the voyage botanist", as "Cook's botanist" sounds unusual to me
"It's assumed that the chorus was created by bellbirds" contractions are generally avoided in formal prose (other instances as well, several "it's", a "doesn't" and a "don't")
"The first specimen was collected by Johann Reinhold Forster and Anders Sparrman in April 1773 during the Second voyage of James Cook." suggest avoiding passive voice, e.g. "Johann Reinhold Forster and Anders Sparrman collected the first specimen in April 1773 during James Cook's second voyage."
"The species' scientific epithet" suggest "
specific name" or "species epithet"
"binominal name" (x2) -> binomial name
" Type locality was later corrected to Queen Charlotte Sound." needs "the"
for best practices, the Latin and Mari names should be in language templates
"and a second member of the Anthornis genus." -> "and a second member of the genus Anthornis."
link monotypic, molecular study, clade, phylogenetic, cladogram
so this species is the type species of genus Anthornis? Maybe that should be said explicitly (the genus page isn't obvious about it either)
"fore-flanks" according to
this source, this word is obsolete?
""Similar to other honeyeaters, bellbirds have a brush-like tongue which is used to collect nectar deeply from flowers." which -> that
"The tongue is canaliculated" I happen to know what this means because the same term is used in lichenology, but I doubt most others would know, so it should probably be glossed or rephrased.
"Prominent New Zealand ornithologist" Needs "The", else is
false title
"In the South Island, bellbirds did not hit their lowest numbers in Canterbury until 1900." suggest "In the South Island, bellbird numbers in Canterbury did not reach their lowest point until 1900."
"Bellbird populations have suffered significant declines due to the destruction of native forests (initiated by Māori and perpetuated by Europeans[63]) and the introduction of invasive predators such as cats (Felix catus), mustelids (ferret (Mustela furo), stoat (M. erminea), weasel (M. nivalis)), and rodents (Norwegian rat (Rattus norvegicus), ship rat (Rattus rattus))." the double parentheses are slightly awkward, maybe a prose tweak needed?
"a disease such as avian malaria which was introduced" comma before "which"
maybe links: taxa, passerine
"honey-bee" according to its article, this is usually written as either "honeybee" or "honey bee"
"More recent research" Recommend not using "recent", especially here as the two cited sources (both 2010) are less recent than the source discussed in the previous sentence (2015)
"According to
IUCN" unlink this (was already linked two sentences ago)
"The decline is most prominent in lowlands below 1000 m above sea level." suggest "The decline is most prominent in lowland areas under 1000 meters in elevation." to avoid the slightly awkward below/above construction
Relationship with humans
link proverb, oratories, snare trap, fowler
suggest enclosing Maori words/phrases in lang template
about the translation, isn't Kī mai ki a au more accurately rendered as "and if you ask me" or "if you were to ask me"?
"Bellbirds enjoy eating the fruit of a small forest tree" In formal writing, attributing human emotions or preferences to animals can sometimes be seen as anthropomorphism and may be considered inappropriate.
"The fowler would then set up a low laying horizontal perch snare…" -> "The fowler would then set up a low-lying horizontal perch snare"
Misc
missing information ("missing" = stuff I expected to see in the article but did not):
what are the morphological differences between the subspecies? What do their subspecies epithets mean?
any chance of including citations to the protologues of these subspecies?
the sources all look reliable and appropriate. This is not required to pass GAN, but if you wanted, you could tidy the citations a bit by changing "p." to "pp." where appropriate, consistently using endashes instead of hyphens for page number ranges, and italicising scientific names in the title of sources.
Images & media:
File:Walter Lawry Buller (English School).jpg needs "a United States public domain tag to indicate why this work is in the public domain in the United States."
all other & media have appropriate licenses for use on Wikipedia