The plot needs some work that it flows better. For instance, He collapses. It is kidney failure and Peter needs a new one. sounds awkward. How about: He collapses from kidney failure, and is told he needs a new kidney.
After becoming Jaundiced, Peter says he "feels like he can go on for another 20 years" referencing The Simpsons long run and their trademark yellow skin. Needs a reference.
I've removed the statement. It was added by someone else, and I believe it is completely original research. I doesn't belong in the article.
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03:28, 5 March 2011 (UTC)reply
The Reception section only contains reviews from two critics. Find a few more please.
I've added the only other review from a reliable source that is available, and I believe the section is now more than sufficient in its coverage of reception of the episode.
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03:37, 5 March 2011 (UTC)reply