Add a sentence directly before the release one mentioning when the song was confirmed followed by the teaser
Not done, @
K. Peake: not sure what you mean by this. Are you suggesting that the first sentence of the paragraph be moved to directly before the official release sentence?
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16:46, 3 August 2022 (UTC)reply
"Commercially, the song reached the top 10" it reached the top 10 in other countries too, so shouldn't you add the number then write, including...? Make sure everything here is written out in the body, though.
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music video and move the release to the music video section, however the 16 hours part is not sourced
Partly done couldn't find a source for the exact time besides
YouTube Data Viewer so I omitted it and wrote "soon after" the midnight single release to give the impression that the two weren't released simultaneously.
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16:24, 2 August 2022 (UTC)reply
The track listing and album art being announced are not sourced
Cut down the amount of direct quoting from Uproxx after the first sentence; I think it would be better to start a sentence one with "Gracie elaborated that..." putting some into your own words
"She begins to flirt with a man whom she shares a dance with before" → "Doja Cat begins to flirt with a man whom she spends time in the club with, before"
VersaceSpace You should try to fix the remaining issues and regarding The Needle Drop, it is even more unreliable if being used for something like actual comp rather than critical commentary and Forbes contributors are written off at
WP:FORBES. --
K. Peake07:48, 6 August 2022 (UTC)reply
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VersaceSpace: The reply was not worded well by me since it was routed in the false premise that you had definitely used the fix dead links tool; click on view history and select this option from the far right. --
K. Peake06:43, 8 August 2022 (UTC)reply
Not done, not sure what source you're referring to but I assume its Needle Drop. I personally think we can let this slide since it's literally just being used to describe the attribute of a hi-hat sound. I agree with most editors that Fantano's album reviews should not be used as valid, opinionated "reviews" on Wikipedia since they are self-published and unprofessional, but this is not such a case since it's something so specific and rather objective.
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20:41, 5 August 2022 (UTC)reply
Not done, again, these chart positions being cited here are objective facts and aren't liable to editorial oversight that is warned about in WP:RSP (where it actually is listed as "generally reliable" so I don't see the problem here).
Remove or replace ref 41 with an actual Billboard citation
VersaceSpace Regarding the changes that you are confused about, I meant the release sentence should use "the album" instead of its title which has been fixed now and write August 31 instead, so it is less repetitive. Also, the accolades should be a separate para in reception and written out in prose since one small table is not enough to warrant a full section. --
K. Peake09:16, 29 July 2022 (UTC)reply
VersaceSpace I have further comments for you; why does the Vulture ref not show "Need to Know" when I load it, can you replace the Twitter ref with a citation from Billboard magazine's website and when will you implement the remaining changes? --
K. Peake07:46, 2 August 2022 (UTC)reply
Hi @
Kyle Peake: I've been waiting for
Cybertrip to implement some reference changes since they expanded the article, but it seems like he's a bit busy, would waiting for him be okay? Also, would you be fine with me removing the points that have been addressed with Done. —VersaceSpace🌃14:10, 2 August 2022 (UTC)reply
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VersaceSpace: Periodd!! Good ass article (even though it says nothing about the reversed hi-hats haha). Thanks for nominating it and sorry I didn’t carry my load well enough. You’re a great editor :)
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