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I do not have access to Marsh 1984, a quite detailed biography. Still, I believe the article is broad enough for GAN. Much of the book is repeated or summarized in Marvin Jr. 2015 and Labelle 2021, and the two Croneis 1991 articles are practically stand-ins. I am in the process of contacting Ohian libraries that may somehow lend the book, but we'll have to go without it for now.
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Much appreciated! By the way, I recently received the biography mentioned in the article through
WP:RX. It would be useful for fleshing out details, which I'll be getting around to, but I still believe the article addresses the main points. Anywho, hope you enjoy!
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02:59, 21 June 2024 (UTC)reply
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Averageuntitleduser: That sounds great! Would you prefer to incorporate material from that source before or after the review? I'm happy to put this on hold and come back to it later if that would suit you better. Let me know either way! —
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Averageuntitleduser: I'm getting around to this review slowly but steadily owing to some other things that are keeping me busy at the moment. However, could I ask you to send me exerpts of a couple sources I've not been able to get library access for? That'll help me do the number of verifiability checks that I like to do for a GAN review. The sources in question are
Labelle 2021, pp. 53–63, and
Littlefield Jr. & Parins 2011, pp. 273–274. Let me know whether or not that'll be possible, and you can reach me over
email or Discord, whichever you're more comfortable with. —
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17:16, 25 June 2024 (UTC)reply
Though I truly find it a shame to do so, I am quick-failing this nominee. Several issues which may be more manageable individually have added up to an unmanageable review. Under other circumstances, I might've extended the review and worked with you to iron out the issues to push this article over the finish line as I have for some other nominees. I'm unfortunately unable to make that commitment at the moment, and I don't think it would be fair to string you along for feedback. My primary concerns lie with the lead section, the neutrality and unencyclopedic tone of several statements, and the uncertain reliability of the sources. Note that I stopped my prose review when I started to come up against these issues, so the later sections haven't received as much attention in this review.
However, please don't let this discourage you from continuing to work on the article! I admire the depth of research you've put into this subject and I think that, with a little work, this article has lots of potential not only for another GAN but a future FAC! I'm happy to help out where I can, so let me know if you have any questions! —
TechnoSquirrel69 (
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02:35, 4 July 2024 (UTC)reply
Alright, I've responded to the comments below for the ease of future reviewers. If anything, thank you for failing it rather than coasting me along. It helped me realize how much this article needed a good shearing, some less verbosity, and some more neutrality. Again, thank you for the critiques as well as the compliments! I'm excited to see where this article goes.
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01:19, 6 July 2024 (UTC)reply
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Is it normal to mention the county where a person was born in the infobox? I understand there's some disagreement between the sources, but that seems to me like even more of a reason to leave it out.
Done
While we're at it, the link should only encompass "Owl Creek", not the rest of the address. The same applies to the second sentence of the prose.
Done
"Wyandot Mission Church" should include the city, state, and country as well.
Done
The lead,
especially the opening paragraph, gets far too detailed in places. Information like the exact Indigenous sites she visited as a child or the value of belongings she had stolen receive
undue weight placed where they are. I'd recommend reading through
Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Biography § Lead section and seeking other biography articles as examples. This will require a significant refactoring of the lead to address.
Agreed. I've both broadened it and trimmed it a fair bit.
Information is also presented in a somewhat confusing order. "Two of her children with David Young, who she married in 1833, were buried in its grounds." directly follows a sentence about her at age eight, meaning these two sentences already cover a large swath of her life in a non-chronological order.
Agreed. It should be more straightforward now.
Body
"Eliza anticipated thatshewould..." It's ambiguous which person this pronoun is referring to.
Fixed
"...and while there, Solomon spotted many rabbits." This seems to me like a rather odd detail which would fit better in a story of Solomon's life than an encyclopedic biography. There are several other mentions of similar details, such as "...enacted a tea party with them by an oak tree when she was still five, with acorns for cups." and "Eliza prepared a squirrel stew dinner." This is a trend throughout the article — even the tone of the prose seems more storytime-like in places.
And how did I ever think this was encyclopedic?? Done. Admittedly, Marsh's level of detail in describing these events would probably convince a lot of editors into mentioning them.
Careful about phrasing information in
Wikipedia's voice. The interjection "...busy hunting and trading along village footpaths," is not
neutral. Claiming they were busy is likely also
original research as neither of the cited sources have it phrased this way. Statements like this should be attributed to their author or simply rephrased to be more straightforward. Several other sentences have similar issues.
Done. I hope I've attributed all of the presuppositions throughout the article, e.g. the cemetery or visiting Indigenous sites is important, Solomon was a noble woman. I also removed Having endured the traumatic journey, Labelle implies this, but I believe in letting the two paragraphs speak on their own.
I'm uncertain of the statements "A religious vigor pervaded Solomon at school." and "She also began sharing the gospel..." See my
comment about the source.
They were also a bit, welll.. pretentious, removed.
"He was likewise a widow." To my knowledge, widow refers exclusively to women.
Fixed
"pioneers from all parts of the county" is an unattributed quote.
Integrated the quote and toned it down. I combed through the other quotes and fixed at least one more instance of this.
The bundle in citation 1 is pretty confusing, as it's difficult to see where one reference ends and the next one starts. I would recommend keeping them in separate <ref>...</ref> tags and using a footnote to bundle if necessary.
I can't do much, as it is the result of {{inflation/fn}}, but I would agree it's a bit hard to discern.
Newspapers.com and NewspaperArchive.com are considered archive sources themselves and don't need the additional |archive-url= or |access-date=.
Done
Same goes for citation 42, which is a book source (sort of).
I have concerns with the reliability of
Neely 1939. For starters, if the
S. J. Clarke Publishing Company article is to be believed, the work was
self-published; I don't see any evidence of Neely being an expert historian or biographer, which would make this source acceptable if it were the case. The section on Solomon also contains statements such as "But early in the 1840s something happened. A catastrophe befell the Wyandots", which comes off as highly unprofessional writing even for its time of publication.
I've gone ahead and removed this source. To give Neely some merit, she had a
long career as a journalist for The Cincinnati Post; still, I couldn't find as many historical stories as I'd like. I thought this book inherited some reliability as being written by the Ohio Newspaper Women's Association, but this was a bit hasty. I haven't found really any news stories that commended them or detailed their activities beyond annual meetings. As well, I have not seen some of the book's claims anywhere else, and I would agree that the tone is quite romanticized. This is all to say, Neely does not pass the chopping block; thank you for pointing this out.
Marsh 1984 has similar issues with self-publishing; Labelle citing it could
lend it some credibility, though it is referred to as a children's book, which again casts doubt on how reliable the work is even considering the volume of field research that was conducted for it.
I would agree. Marsh is not fully writing for an academic audience, so I have to be cautious. There is the occasional line of dialogue, which isn't ideal, and the level of detail in describing the environment and wildlife is a bit suspicious at times. Still, in my opinion, the vast majority of information seems credible, and to boot, there are 24 footnotes, which is much better than nothing. This book is a crucial source, so it's an odd dichotomy. To make sure I've not gone overboard in its use, I've cut out almost all information that isn't mentioned in the two previous Croneis articles. He published the Telegraph-Forum and was at least a
somewhatrespected historian. As well, the two summaries are quite encyclopedic considering the source material.
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