The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that the PolishâLithuanian Commonwealth army(troops pictured) was so underfunded that it was often outnumbered 12 to 1 by neighboring armies?
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Overall, this article looks to be at or about GA-level so I'm going to work my way through the article starting with the Background section first and finishing with the Lead. My first impression is that the lead is rather "thin", but I will come to a firm decision on this later in the review.
Pyrotec (
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19:15, 21 November 2012 (UTC)reply
Background -
Looks OK.
Heavy Polish-Lithuanian Hussars of the Polish-Lithuanian Commonwealth -
This entire section, three paragraphs, is unreferenced.
The fifth paragraph has: "......General of the Artillery (Poland)|General of the Artillery post into the Commonwealth army.[20]". Could this be an "either/or" job title or perhaps a pipe-lined wikilink,
General of the Artillery (Poland), that has lost its the first pair of its first and last pair of square brackets/braces?
Sorry, I was working in a different web tab. Its this one (but the bolding is mine, it not in the article): "Starting in 1613, the ..... This time also marked the introduction of the General of the Artillery (Poland)|General of the Artillery]] post into the Commonwealth army.[20] ...."
The lead does appear to induce the topic of the article and summarise the main points, which is its proper function, but its rather "thin". The lead would be better if it had a bit "more meat", so about twice as long as it currently is.
Not sure what to add to lead, perhaps you'd have some suggestions? Please note I added a section on the operational history, as I thought the article was missing on the comprehensiveness without mentioning some of the most famous wars and battles of that era. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus|
reply here20:33, 27 November 2012 (UTC)reply
I saw that you had added material to the lead and fixed the broken link, so I awarded the article GA status. Since there is a new section on Operational history, you should ensure that the new material is also added to the Lead in summary form.
Pyrotec (
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20:42, 27 November 2012 (UTC)reply
B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
I'm pleased to be able to award this article GA. It's been sitting around a long time in the
WP:GAN queue. Congratulations on producing an informative article, which is now a GA, on a topic previously unknown to me.
Pyrotec (
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20:13, 27 November 2012 (UTC)reply