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Overall, there is the base for a very good article. However, there is enough concern over the breadth of information to make this a suitable GA. As a Washingtonian who favors the right but also thinks that a bowl doesn't hurt, I trust that you can make this GA happen.
The lead is intended to be an overall summary that could standalone as a mini article. It is lacking since it is just a short paragraph.
The first paragraph discussing his early life is relevantly bare. Did he graduate from college? Did he have a ob before moving? A current problem with our elected officials is that they move to different districts. Did he actually have a job in the state or did he just move hoping to get election?
There is a ref discussing terminating contracts with BYU but nothing else besides that line. The reader wants more.
The image is too big.
Varies grammar may need to be looked at. "In 1970... " needs a coma.
Is "37th Legislative District" or nothing similar wikilinkable? Maybe he city council or another handful of things. Do a whole check of what could be usefully winkilikned.
"He grabbed headlines on a number of occasions due to his radical politics and firebrand activism." Is a major issue with the article. I see nothing about this in the prose. Without at least a couple of paragraphs going into detail this can't be considered for GA.
"later, drove an armed contingent of Black Panthers in a state-owned vehicle to Rainier Beach High School during a period of racial tensions" Why?
Later life leaves more to be desired. It isn't a focus of what makes him notable but it is hard to raise an article to Ga with a 1 line paragraph.
The sourcing needs work. The obituary isn;t formatted a all. Please make sure to include access dates to online sources. Historylink has a very specific citation style request.
The external link is not capped correctly and it is questionable if it is even needed.
What was his voting record like? He had some issues that looks like current dem policies but I can't see why he was a Republican.
Good base. A couple images, prose give a decent overview, there is sourcing, an infobox is there. It jhust isn't ready yet so I am keeping this nomination open.
Cptnono (
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06:21, 24 January 2015 (UTC)reply
Unfortunately the nominator is not able to work on this article. I will circle back to see if I can fix anything if time permits.
Cptnono (
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20:26, 30 January 2015 (UTC)reply