Consider Since MCCDC's founding, several other denominations to read Since MCCDC's founding, several other Christian churches
Use of LGBT people is relevant as it refers to the period circa 1970; the term is different today, but the history should remain so.
I changed it to "Christian denominations", but if you think "Christian churches" is still more appropriate, I can change that as well. To me it would read as churches as in stand alone congregations, not groups aka denominations (ex: United Methodists, Presbyterians, etc.), which is what I'm conveying.
APKwhisper in my ear04:15, 27 October 2020 (UTC)reply
History
Early years
Is it reasonably well written?
History gives a well thought out account of congregation growth, ordination of pastors, and development of pastoral care.
Inclusion of the UpStairs Lounge arson attack is appropriate; it is a reminder of hate attitude of the times, and perhaps, self-hate. ===Church growth===
Is it reasonably well written?
The search and settlement for a permanant place of worship is noted;
The interfaith aid to the Jewish egalitarian community is an important inclusion,
The changes in leadership with pastors leaving to open congregations in other cities is an indicator of growth nationally;
AIDS Epidemic
Is it reasonably well written?
The role of the Church commumnity in holding AIDS forums is noted;
The attempts to attract people of colour in 1983 is a worthy initiative;
Hosting of funeral services for free and other forms of pastoral care is observed.
New Sanctuary
Is it reasonably well written?
Overcrowding at the rowhouse is part of the needful community development
growth of the gay religious community and change in mentality is an historical moment;
attention to women, people of colour and the music delate terms of community growth and its needs ...
LGBT Rights
Is it reasonably well written?
I am concerned that the first three paragraphs in LGBT rights don't directly address rights but rather, give history.
The rights coverage commences in the 4th paragraph.
What impact does the LGBT rights movement have on the MCCDC Congregation, its steadiness, its service to the community and its growth?
You need to develop a narrative in this section about how we get to result of other denominations finally accepting LGBT people or move it to a new section.
Check back with me if this is unclear.
The second paragraph discusses LGBT rights, but yeah I can see what you mean about the others. I'm trying to figure out to reword/reorganize the section. I might change the heading since it's more of a history section.
APKwhisper in my ear07:40, 27 October 2020 (UTC)reply