The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that one reviewer thought that the final battleground of video game Mass Effect 2: Arrival broke the laws of physics?
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"and the fact that the pack mostly consists of linear combat sequences, " - perhaps "and too many linera combat sequences" or similar. The main issue is "the fact that the"; does not flow well
"still praiseworthy" - I would remove "still" as you only mentioned story and sequences
" in order to progress" - could be just "to progress"
"Unlike most of the missions, Arrival introduces a new mission " - repetition of "mission". It is a bit confusing, so suggest replacing one of the words
"a deep cover agent" - what does "deep" mean here?
Thank you for your review -- much appreciated. I've addressed the issues you brought up. Let me know if there's anything else. --
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