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Unlink United Kingdom (
MOS:OL, here and in the text). Y
The Godfather Of Sudan's Laboratory Medicine – no italics, and The has no capital letter. This issue also occurs in the text.
I used quotations hope that is OK
Red link Stack Medical Research Laboratories in the infobox. Y
1.1 Early life and education
Link bacteriology; parasitology. Y
Judge of Al Gitana – is this his official title?
no, I will make use no cap for Judge
He attended – 'Haseeb attended’ as this is a new paragraph. Y
His family – ‘Haseeb’s family’, for the sake of clarity. Y
I would move the image to the other side, as at present it affects the position of the following subsection. Y
medical education – ‘his medical education’. Y
(DKSM) – is not needed, as the abbreviation does not reoccur in the text. Y
mention 1934 – the citations that follow this are not all needed, only keep the minimum necessary to verify the text (see
WP:OVERKILL for more information). There should not be any inside the brackets. Y
Ditto or 1946.Y
I added them to a note with 1 ref
1.2 Medical career and research
parasitology should not be linked here. Y
The image should not be enlarged.
image removed as in the default size you cannot see anything
He left Stack, in 1963, succeeded by Mohamed Hamad Satti, to become a professor of Microbiology and Parasitology,and the first Sudanese Dean of the Faculty of Medicine at the University of Khartoum until 1969 – needs copy editing (for instance by breaking up this overlong sentence). Y
He was an examiner - is the start of a single sentence paragraph, and would be better included at the end of the previous one. Y
Link vaccine. Y
and epidemic meningitis – is followed by three citations. Only one is needed. Y
The following journals should be in italics - Nature; The Lancet; British Medical Journal; Sudan Medical Journal. Y
Editor-in-Chief – has no capitals. Y
Harry Hoogstraal needs to be introduced.
added renowned American entomologist and parasitologist
Harry Hoogstraal stated, renowned can be seen as peacock term put the guy was described as "the greatest authority on ticks and tickborne diseases who ever lived."
I agree. Renowned works imo. AM
1.3 Mayor of Omdurman
Link Queen Elizabeth II in the caption. Y
to the right of the Queen – on her right, or to the right of the photograph?
added Haseeb is seated beside the Queen, positioned to her right.
1.4 Personal life and death
e.g., Al Hakeem (Arabic: الحكيم) needs to be explained more fully, so that readers understand what is being referred to here.
removed. I think the source meant that he used to write a diary called Al Hakeem (the doctor) put could not find anything to support this OR
shortly after - is too vague. Did this happen weeks, days, or hours afterwards?
fixed to "few months"
I’m unclear what His funeral ceremony reflected the feelings of the medical community means. I’m guessing what is being referred to here is the number of medical people who were there, but it’s not clear.
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