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Reviewer: Wasted Time R ( talk · contribs) 14:48, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
I have begun reviewing this article.
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14:48, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
Neat article, but a few comments here and there
Re the lede and infobox:
by the end of his life, was one of the leading media figures in New England. isn't repeated or cited anywhere in the body. It's clear that he was a leading newspaper figure in Maine, but does that extend to all of New England? Did Lewiston papers have a substantial readership in other New England states?
In the infobox, banker should be added as an additional occupation. And a children count could be added.
Re Early life and education:
Is it known what subject his degree at Bates was in?
Re Career:
This section is missing any tangible indication of what the Lewiston papers were like when Costello was either business manager or general manager or president. Were they profitable? What was their circulation? What were the papers known for - did they win any prizes for local reporting? Did they have any pronounced editorial bent?
Similarly, it would also be good to have some indication of the size of Androscoggin County Savings Bank, and how well it did when Costello was its president.
A mention of the "A Leaf Out of My Notebook" pieces, Costello's reports from his travels around the country that were printed in his paper, seems worthwhile to include. (sourced by Lewiston Daily Sun obit)
A mention that he was a
United Baptist and of his longtime role in the Lewiston United Baptist Church also seems like it should be included. It will not be out of place in the Career section, since religion was a fundamental part of life in small-to-medium-sized towns and cities and interacted with one's career. (sourced by Lewiston Daily Sun obit)
... when incumbent William J. Crawshaw, resigned due ... - that comma seems unnecessary to me.
Re Later life and death:
His son, Russell, succeeded him ... - I would make this a new paragraph, since it's dealing with what happened after Louis's death.
Re images:
Can a later-in-life photo for a top image be found?
The caption for the Bates Student photo should also mention that his future wife Sadie Brackett is second from right in the bottom row.
Re References and end matter:
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fns 12 and 13 are missing 'via Newspapers.com' credits.
The
Category:20th-century American newspaper editors seems dubious, since article never says he worked as an editor. I think this should instead be
Category:20th-century American newspaper publishers (people).
Also
Category:American bank presidents can be added,
as well as
Category:20th-century American businesspeople.
In sum, it's a nice article and I don't think too much additional work is needed to bring it to GA level. Wasted Time R ( talk) 16:38, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
@ Rockhead126: Good work, the additions have definitely made for a fuller narrative. A few follow-on or additional comments:
Children: Louise Russell – per Template:Infobox person, I think this should just say "2", since the children do not have articles of their own.
You can link to Lewiston Evening Journal. It's a redirect now, but someday it may have an article there.
leading media figures – using this term here is an anachronism. I did a search of "media figure" in Newspapers.com for 1950–1959 and there are zero uses of it in this sense (the 33 hits you get are all something else). Whereas if you do the same search for 2000–2009, you get a couple thousand real hits. So I would suggest changing this to something else, unless you feel strongly about using a current term.
His papers gained a reputation for being progressive but not so much as to alienate change-averse readers. – what does 'progressive' mean in this sense? I suspect it is in relation to looking at new business or editorial practices? Or is it a political reference, in the sense of the Progressive Era?
Writing under the headline "A Leaf Out of My Notebook," Costello shared with Sun readers reports of he and Sadie's cross-country travels, all the while remaining devoted to his home state, with editorials focused on portraying local communities in a positive light. – this makes it sound like the editorials were part of the "Leaf Out of My Notebook" series. Suggest splitting into two sentences and rephrasing for clarity.
Rabboni Lodge #150 – this should use "No." instead, per MOS:NUMBERSIGN.
lifetime of achievements, dedicated service – this is a little too praiseworthy in narrative tone, the honor can speak for itself. So I think you can just say "achievements" and "service".
In his will, he left $5,000 each – How much was his estate worth? Without knowing that, it's hard to know how generous these bequests were.
Re File:Louis_Bartlett_Costello.jpg, there is a typo in the Description on Commons (should be "publisher")
Re File:Lewiston United Baptist Church postcard.jpg, the Source on Commons should say that both the front and the back are viewable on the source site (thus making possible the statement that there was no copyright notice).
For what it's worth, the retrieval dates you have in the cites for newspaper sources are unnecessary. Retrieval dates are really only needed for web pages that aren't dated themselves – see WP:CITEWEB and the subsection on citing newspapers just above that. The downside of using them here is that they clutter up the References section visually with a lot 2020s when in fact most of the sources are from long ago. But these kind of retrieval dates are not disallowed and in the end it's the choice of the person writing the article.
Anyway, good work, we are close to being done. Wasted Time R ( talk) 21:45, 12 October 2020 (UTC)