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This source provided in the article clearly mentions that Kalidas released after Bhakta Prahlada.
Dates mentioned in this source are September 15 1931 - bhakta Prahlada and October 31 1931 - Kalidas
Moreover the claim that Bhakta Prahlad released later than Kalidas is unreliable, except for one source there is no other source which says so, all the other sources including the above mentioned says that Bhakta Prahlad released before Kalidas film.
Also this source (Hindu News) is very inconsistent with its information and unrealiable because it has published numerous articles contradicting its own self, in an inconsistent manner.
Please see the links below with contradicting information from the same source:
Comment Will await DrBlofeld's review. Meanwhile, congratulation to Kailash for working on this important film. The article looks good :)--
Dwaipayan (
talk)
01:44, 1 March 2014 (UTC)reply
Lead
You might want to start with the norm and say is a 1931 Indian film, the first sound film made in Tamil and the second sound film to be made in South India.
"The film was based on the life of the third-century Sanskrit poet Kālidāsa; it " -new sentence please
Reword the sentence which begins with Although primarily a Tamil film as "Although primarily a Tamil film, due to additional dialogue in
Telugu and
Hindi it is often considered India's first multilingual film".
Swadesamitran - in the Tamil newspaper Swadesamitran
" However, because all of its fifty songs were in Tamil, it is considered a Tamil film only". Contradicts what you said earlier with the dialogue. It can't be considered both can it?
I don't know, but if it is used in British English then it should be acceptable in Indian English as well. (After all, Indian English borrows lot from British due to the
British Raj).
Kailash29792 (
talk)
08:20, 2 March 2014 (UTC)reply
"In the forest, the minister comes across a foolish cowherd sitting in a tree and cutting down the branch on which he is sitting. The minister persuades the cowherd to come to the palace and has Vidhyadhari marry him. When Vidhyadhari realises she has been cheated and is married to a cowherd, she prays to the goddess
Kali for redress." Vague. Why is he foolish and how does she realize that she's been cheated? It would seem she was the fool!
"Because Venkatesan's first language was Telugu and could not get his Tamil right, his dialogue was in Telugu.[2] Because the" -repetition of because.
Music
"The film had compositions" -The film featured compositions
" Scholars Selvaraj Velayutham and Birgit Meyer believe that the nationalistic songs featured in the film had nothing to do with the main plot.[23][24] Film News Anandan believes " -repetition of believe
What is "Film News Anandan"? Is it Film News or Film News critic Anandan or what?
"Bhaskara Das was the lyricist". Too short and snappy. Merge into "The film featured compositions by the carnatic musician Thyagaraja, with lyrics by Bhaskara Das" further up.
Release
30th -against MOS
"along Wall Tax Road throwing rose petals" -add comma after Road.
Shouldn't "Kalidas was remade as Kaviratna Kalidas in 1937 and Mahakavi Kalidas in 1955, both of which were critically appreciated and commercially successful. " come after the mention of the only film of 1931 and lost film? Can you mention the directors/actors of each?
Done. I have removed Kaviratna Kalidas as I cannot find any other RS that proves its existence. As for Mahakavi Kalidas, I have added the director's name, although the source does not mention it.
Kailash29792 (
talk)
08:30, 2 March 2014 (UTC)reply
References
Why is the Deccan and CNN linked but not The Hindu in publishers?
Why is the first book not linked and the others are?
A little rough still, but given the period of Indian film I think it just about covers the basics. Try to merge a few of the shorter snappy sentences to improve flow.♦
Dr. Blofeld20:31, 1 March 2014 (UTC)reply
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have
fair use rationales:
B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
Much improved. Would be good if you could find a bit more, but it's fine for GA given the period in Indian film. If you can find the names of the crew an infobox might be worth it, but me enforcing an infobox would look kinda hypocritical LOL.♦
Dr. Blofeld11:55, 2 March 2014 (UTC)reply