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Nominator: The Blue Rider ( talk · contribs) 11:07, 30 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: SnowFire ( talk · contribs) 04:13, 30 June 2024 (UTC)
As a general comment: I'm a little worried that a lot of the sources to this article seem to be basically Church press releases, or based on them. I get that by its nature, a lot of information is going to be coming from the official source, but I'm hoping that there will be some independent, secondary sources here as well. (For example, a lot of the referenced articles after he was appointed Archbishop of Granada appear to be quoting the exact same source, down to identical phrasings. In these cases, the reference count can be misleading, because it's just an echo chamber of reposts.) I'm also seeing some very direct quotes of the sources, which is okay sometimes when there's just factual data you're reporting, but watch out for close paraphrasing, which can happen even in translation.
Also, usual proviso that you should feel free to push back on prose comments - these are suggestions, not demands.
Are these lectures really so important as to qualify for the lede? This source dedicates a mere sentence fragment to "ha dictado conferencias en Puerto Rico," as do sources copying it like [1] and [2]. If they were important, which source covers them?
You'll have to forgive me if these terms are better known among English-speaking Catholics, but they're pretty unfamiliar to me, and I consider myself comparatively well-read. Or rather, I know "sacerdote" is "priest" in Spanish of course, but I haven't heard of it used particularly often in English. "Incardinate" is a similarly rare word. If you want to say that yes, these terms are known, then fine, but ngrams suggests that "incardinated" is extremely rare if nothing else. Maybe "priestly ordination" and "received into" instead?
"dedicated himself" is a very flowery way of putting it. Maybe just "he performed pastoral work"? Also, "collaboration" reads rather more hostily than probably intended here. Was this really "sharing religious teachings"? I presume this is from [3] which is frustratingly vague on the subject of what precisely he did. Which town? Did he host a radio show? Was it a religious service or like a talk show? Dunno if the sources exist, but that would be useful. If that source is truly all we have, I'd suggest reducing this to something equally vague, like "He worked with local radio stations to provide Christian content, especially for those who couldn't attend Mass."
Nit, here and elsewhere: This is not a requirement for GA status, but is good practice and is a requirement for FA status... you might want to consider the Template:Lang tag for accessibility. Basically, mark this with {{lang|es|Medios de Comunicación y de la Oficina de Información|italic=no}} so that screen readers "know" to pronounce this in Spanish. Additionally, for a random non-Spanish speaking reader, it might be helpful to add a glossed translation into English in parentheses afterward. (The same for later Spanish bits - non-Spanish speakers seeing "Red Informática de la Iglesia en América Latina" will think red-the-color, not red-the-Internet.)
Again a case of three sources that are too close, so close that they were clearly copying each other. But none of these sources bother to say when he was a professor and for how long. Do any of your other sources happen to cover this? (Also, as a tiny nitpick, I'd argue the wikilink to "professor" is overlinking - per WP:OL, no need to link common English words that aren't super-relevant.
Did he? The sources seem to say he was a visiting professor at es:Universidad Católica de El Salvador (side note: that's a red link on EN wiki? Huh.) which is if anything more prestigious than just delivering some lectures. And on the Puerto Rico side, it's back to "why is this relevant" - we have so little detail it's hard to know how much it mattered. I'm not 100% sure what he did in Cuba.
Apologies if I've misinterpreted the source myself, but I'm not sure that's what the source says? "ha asesorado sobre temas de pastoral de las comunicaciones a los obispos de las Conferencias Episcopales de El Salvador y de Chile". He didn't do the pastoral communication for the conference, he advised them on how to do it themselves, if I read that correctly.
This sentence doesn't really work. "became a member", and the "took charge of the event's press direction" is phrased very strangely. This also seems to be quoting the original sentence a little too directly. "He worked at the press office for the Congreso Mundial de TV Católicas" perhaps?
What does this mean? Was he, like, an interpreter? An advocate for Spanish-as-a-language?
Same question here - what does "deputy of the Spanish language" mean / imply? Also, per MOS:DASH, use an ndash for a date range like this.
Same question here too - "the consultant" is rather mysterious. What did that role do / imply? And was he really "the" consultant? I'm not sure I get the impression from the original Spanish there was only one... but maybe I'm off.
No he wasn't. Gil was, not the archbishop. (And the date range is clearly more important than the year length - "From 1998 to 2011", perhaps.)
Another ndash. And despite suggesting removing some wikilinks above, I'd definitely add a Wikilink here to Spanish Episcopal Conference, that'd be relevant.
Think that's enough for now. Really hoping that there are some more sources than just the current 1/3/5 for the Priesthood section... SnowFire ( talk) 05:02, 30 June 2024 (UTC)
@ The Blue Rider: - see you made some edits this weekend, just making sure you saw this.
I suppose I might as well follow-up on the rest of the article, I made some minor edits.
Is this really shown by the rest of the article? I'm not saying it's not true, but working with radio stations is only very loosely a technological role - maybe he was just talking. Similarly, his other roles are often described as "communications", which CAN mean tech, but can also just mean writing messages and email campaigns and the like. Even if he did do tech roles, was it established it was because of his degree?
The career-as-bishop section has some fairly minor material IMO. It's sourced but none of it seems TOO super-important, more like he was just commenting on news of the day. If he really played a strong role here, it would help to have better sources to show what it was.
Anyway the biggest concern remains what I mentioned above - do we have any better sources than basically a Church press release and news articles that are very clearly copying parts of that press release for his earlier history? SnowFire ( talk) 19:23, 7 July 2024 (UTC)