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There shouldn't be any one sentence paragraphs (like the opening one). Merge one and two sentence paragraphs into others, unless they have a different subject.
"and based on the premise" need an "is"
"fantasy novel, an alternate history" "as" instead of "an" I think. Up to you. Never mind, I'm wrong
Looking at Louis Lambert (novel), To Kill a Mockingbird, and some others at Wikipedia:Fa#Literature and theatre it looks like these articles should start with some of the out of universe info before the "Plot summary" section. I recommend moving "Composition and publication" up one section.
"anything she does say seems unconnected" - "disconnected" or "unconnected to reality"? Not sure since I haven't read it.
I'm not going to make this a sticking point, but if you're going for FA, you may want to cut down on the size of the "Plot summary" section. It reads beautifully, though. The last paragraph of the plot doesn't read as beautifully, but it's OK. I can't tell you how to fix it, though. You're a better writer than me. I'll do some more of the review in a bit. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 01:04, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
"temperaments" sp
"Norrell's pupil and he agrees, however he" maby "Norrell's pupil and he agrees. However, he"
"each time she just narrates" no "just"
"tephen believes it applies to him and while the gentleman" no "and"
"The gentleman with thistle-down hair, who appeared to Strange, becomes enraged that Strange has managed to successfully summon him." better wording?
"eternal night" seems like your refing all the other direct quotes, might as well keep it up.
It would be nice to have a little background in Uskglass. I'm not sure what a Raven King is.
Lost-Hope is a fairyland?
"well-regarded science fiction and fantasy writers[12]" refs should go after punctuation.
Is it 250,000 copies in each country, or total?
"8 September 2004, in Britain on 30 September 2004,[1] and in the rest of the world on 4 October" do 2004 once or three times.
OK, done with the first two sections. Very nice. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 01:39, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
How about using Salon and Slate instead of salon.com and slate.com (with wikilinks, of course) Same with the award refs, at least the ones that have a page here. I'm not a crazy MOS hound, so if you're way is correct, leave it. OK, that's probably it for today. I'll finish tomorrow. - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 01:47, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
The style section looks good.
"works of J. R. R. Tolkien, Philip Pullman, T. H. White, and C.S. Lewis" needs a period
"The two are a "study in contrasts"[11]," ref after comma or else remove it, the whole sentence is refed - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 17:11, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
Genre looks good, Friendship looks good, Rationalism looks good,
"In these stories, the fairies are depicted as "capricious, inconsistent in their attitude toward humankind, finally unknowable", characteristics which Clarke integrates into her own fairies." Should that be two sentences? Otherwise Englishness looks good
"helped the novel sell out its first printing[28]" comma or move ref, same with "Clarke as "a superb character writer"[34]" I could be wrong about the MOS for this.
"writing that, "As fantasy" should "As" be cap'ed? How about "New York Times that "What keeps". Should "What" be cap'ed? You're probably right that they should. I think I may have learned something. Anyways, Reception looks good.
"Longlisted for the 2004 Man Booker Prize." has a period and the other awards to not.
Film looks pretty good. Is there any info on whether they still want to make it?
The last sections looks good.- Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 17:36, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
Image rationals look good. Nice free images, too.
Overall, this article is well written, verifiable, and broad in coverage. It's also neutral, stable, and illustrated. You're a much better writer than me, so if you know that any of my comments are incorrect, just ignore them. Anyways, look at them, fix the things that need fixing, and I'll pass this article. Good work! - Peregrine Fisher ( talk) ( contribs) 17:49, 23 January 2009 (UTC)