I'm surprised to see this article un-reviewed for so long given the ship's fame. I'm planning on visiting her whenever I next travel to Japan, so this will be good preparation for the trip (whenever it might be!).
The length of the background section is OK for GA class, but would need to be expanded for A class
OK; not this article is likely to go beyond GA.
Is the 8.8 million yen figure the cost of the ship at the time she was ordered?
Yes, how does it read now?
Am I right in reading the article as meaning that this ship was the only ship of her class? If so, that could be made more explicit.
Done.
"used in all of the preceding battleships." - should this be "used in all of the preceding Japanese battleships." or similar?
OK.
Do we know when, and how, the ship made her way from Britain to Japan? (I imagine that the Japanese would have sent a crew to the UK to sail her back to Japan)
Not sure, I'll have to poke around and see if I can dig something up.
"She was hit twenty times, two of which knocked" - two of what? (I'd suggest changing the first part of this to "She was hit by twenty shells" or similar)
Clarified.
Do we know what caused the fire in September 1905?
Extra detail on the use of the ship as a museum ship would be good (I think that one the articles on Latin American battleships noted that parts were stripped from the ship to restore Mikasa when she was scrapped in Japan).
Nick-D (
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10:42, 22 November 2012 (UTC)reply
Ed forgot to cite that bit in the Amirante Latorre article so I've pinged him to remedy that deficiency and will add it here when he does. Thanks for the review.--
Sturmvogel 66 (
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05:17, 24 November 2012 (UTC)reply