The notation of the largest ship sunk to date, should be phrased in a less time-dependent manner. It would be better to use the {{
as of}} template to note when the source said it was the largest sunk (even though it's unlikely that any larger ship will be sunk by a submarine any time soon).
I removed it altogether (it wasn't in my draft, and I cut it when I first rewrote the page - and then someone added it back in)
Cam(
Chat)23:50, 9 February 2009 (UTC)reply
The significance of the 1954 date for aircraft carrier size should be explained.
Cut that entire section - again, it wasn't in the original draft. Someone's been reverting my modifications, and it's beginning to aggravate me.
Cam(
Chat)23:50, 9 February 2009 (UTC)reply
Also, for the same reason, mere from the sentence beginning While en-route… in the lead.
The paragraph beginning Shinano's existence had been concealed so effectively… has no citations. Also, did the source call Shinano a leviathan? If so, it would be best to attribute it, or reword if not.
Just a few prose issues and one referencing issue. I corrected some italicization and other minor MOS bits that would have taken longer to explain than to fix. —
Bellhalla (
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19:55, 9 February 2009 (UTC)reply