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Hello Wikipedians, I am a content manager at Western Digital. I would like to request some changes to reflect the fact that Western Digital acquired Tegile Systems in 2017 and Tegile is now a brand of the company Western Digital. Due to my COI, I will not be making these changes directly. Thank you.
1. In the Lead, REPLACE "Tegile Systems is a manufacturer of flash storage arrays based in Newark, California." WITH "Tegile Systems is a brand of Western Digital that manufactures flash storage arrays." Western Digital acquired Tegile Systems in 2017. Tegile is now a brand of Western Digital. http://fortune.com/2017/08/29/western-digital-tegile/ https://www.zdnet.com/article/western-digital-buys-flash-storage-company-tegile-systems/
2. DELETE "based in Newark, California" because the Western Digital headquarters is in San Jose, California, not Newark. http://fortune.com/2017/08/29/western-digital-tegile/
3. In the Sidebar (Box) REPLACE "Type: Private" WITH "Type: Brand of Western Digital" https://www.techrepublic.com/article/western-digital-spins-down-hgst-and-tegile-brands-in-hard-disk-market-shuffle/
4. In the Sidebar (Box) REPLACE "Headquarters: Newark, California" WITH "Headquarters: San Jose, California" http://fortune.com/2017/08/29/western-digital-tegile/
5. In the Sidebar (Box) REPLACE "Key People" WITH "Founders" to accurately reflect that these individuals were Tegile founders, not Western Digital founders. https://www.crunchbase.com/organization/tegile-systems#section-overview
AnneElizH ( talk) 00:11, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
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In the example above there are three URL's provided with the claim statements, but these URL's have not been placed using Citation Style 1, which is the style predominantly used by the Tegile Systems article. Your edit request similarly uses only bare URL's for the references. Using the correct style, the WikiFormatted text should resemble the following:
In the example above the references have been formatted according to Citation Style 1, which shows the author, the source's name, date, etc., all information which is lost when only the links are provided. As Wikipedia is a volunteer project, edit requests such yours are generally expected to have this formatting done before the request is submitted for review. |
Kindly rewrite your edit request so that it aligns more with the second example shown in the collapsed section above, and feel free to re-submit that edit request at your earliest convenience. If you have any questions about this formatting please don't hesitate to ask myself or another editor. Regards, Spintendo 01:43, 27 March 2019 (UTC)
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Thank you @Spintendo for your consideration of my proposed changes to the Tegile Systems article. Per your instruction, I have updated the sources to Citation Style 1 using the template. I hope you will now be able to assist me with these changes. Thanks again.
1. In the Lead, REPLACE "Tegile Systems is a manufacturer of flash storage arrays based in Newark, California." WITH "Tegile Systems is a brand of Western Digital that manufactures flash storage arrays." Western Digital acquired Tegile Systems in 2017. Tegile is now a brand of Western Digital. [1] [2]
2. DELETE "based in Newark, California" because the Western Digital headquarters is in San Jose, California, not Newark. [3]
3. In the Sidebar (Box) REPLACE "Type: Private" WITH "Type: Brand of Western Digital" [4]
4. In the Sidebar (Box) REPLACE "Headquarters: Newark, California" WITH "Headquarters: San Jose, California" [5]
5. In the Sidebar (Box) REPLACE "Key People" WITH "Founders" to accurately reflect that these individuals were Tegile founders, not Western Digital founders. [6]
AnneElizH ( talk) 19:27, 23 April 2019 (UTC)
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Spintendo
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Hi! I'm posting here on behalf of Western Digital, a client of my employer Porter Novelli. Tegile has been rebranded to IntelliFlash and sold to a new owner, so I'd like to propose several updates to this article to reflect the latest:
I've mocked up all the proposed edits here. Here's a version with all the changes to the current article highlighted/struck through, so you can see everything I'm proposing at a glance.
Thanks for your help/feedback, and please let me know if I can reformat any of this differently to make it easier to review/implement. Mary Gaulke ( talk) 17:23, 8 June 2020 (UTC)
@ MaryGaulke: i allow you to make the edits yourself but please adhere to a natural point of view.