Background, "Japanese Combined Fleet withdrew from its base at Truk in the Central Pacific and was divided". "Withdrew from" is an action that the JCF took, "was divided" is something that was done to it - should be consistent.
Fixed
Background, "all prisoners other than radio operators" Why were radio operators spared? (I'm assuming it has something to do with using them to break codes or send out false messages, but we may want to make this more clear...or I could be completely wrong!)
They were to be interrogated for useful information - I've clarified this
Raid, "through the Sunda Strait on March." I think we have part of a date missing here...
Fixed
Aftermath - Do we know what happened to the survivors who were sent to the work camps?
Amazingly enough, they all seem to have survived the war - I'd added this.
Do we know when the photographer of
File:Aoba Catapult Trial.jpg died? The tag that is used on the image specifies public domain "50 years after the death of the creator" - but it is quite possible that the creator of an image taken in 1938 was still alive in 1961.
I've replaced the photo with a US Navy image
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Overall very nice. A few prose niggles and one image question; once these are resolved I think the article should be good to go for GA status.
Dana boomer (
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22:03, 28 December 2011 (UTC)reply