Is the question mark in the very first parenthetical supposed to be there? - I think so. It's just a link for instructions on installing a Japanese character set.
CurtisNaito (
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08:20, 17 July 2015 (UTC)reply
I think the lead could be expanded a bit, especially with a bit more specifics on the "scholarship" section and a mention of what's in the "political leanings" section. Done
What exactly is "profile from Marquis Who's Who"? Could you be a bit more specific--is it a print source? Web source? More information in general? - I have clarified that it is Marquis Who's Who On Demand, an online source.
CurtisNaito (
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08:20, 17 July 2015 (UTC)reply
If you want to keep the first paragraph of "scholarship" relatively intact, I would prefer that you change the topic sentence with "Hata has been described by numerous historians as an important scholar on the history of modern Japan", because the first paragraph isn't about specific scholarship, it's more about Hata's legacy itself. Done
"while doing his bachelor's degree" is a bit informal, maybe "while completing his bachelor's degree"? Done
Something that would be helpful to readers is when you're describing Hata's essays, provide links to the actual historical events that are in the titles (i.e. "A History of the
Second Sino-Japanese War") Done
"Nanking Jiken and Death Toll Estimate" might be a better name…unless you think that's too awkward. I feel that it better describes the section. Done
"Research on comfort women" might be better—remove the "the". Also, link to "comfort women" Done
The "political leanings" section is primarily good, except that I would prefer that you have something at the beginning of the section like "Scholars have debated what they believe Hata's political leanings to be." Done
Why is it just "works in English" instead of total works? Why are works in Japanese only excluded? - Well, it would take far too much space to list all of Hata's works. I needed to think of some criteria to limit how long the list would be. I eventually opted to include only his English language books since I guess English Wikipedia users might be more interested in those ones.
CurtisNaito (
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08:20, 17 July 2015 (UTC)reply
"Awards" should probably come after "personal life". Done