"By this time, the system had a central pressure below 1006 mbar (hPa; 29.71 inHg) and sustained winds of 40 mph (65 km/h) were reported in Dakar, Senegal. " - needs a comma somewhere
"According to a 2012 study by Hickey and Connolly-Johnston, this ranked Debbie as the most intense post-hurricane since 1960 to move through the British Isles." - given that Debbie was in 1961, you should reword the sentence a bit. It could imply Debbie was the most intense in a 2 year span. I'd recommend removing "2012" from the first half of the sentence, and then say "...post-hurricane from 1960 to 2012..." Your call though.
"Approximately two percent of the trees in the forestry industry in Ireland were destroyed" - were trees really destroyed? Like an explosion? (or implosion???? o.O)
"Four people were killed in County Cavan, a widow, her two daughters and granddaughter, after a tree fell on their car." - I think a dash is in order for the widow part.
In the third Ireland paragraph - "Most residents lost power for at least several hours and some lost telephone service." - you mentioned downed power lines and loss of communications in the previous paragraph. Is this anything new/different?
"Numerous smaller structures, such as barns and outhouses" - this seems a bit redundant to when you mention the two barns being destroyed near Ballygar.
All in all, it's a good article, but there is a bit too much repetitiveness in the Ireland section. It got a little boring seeing how many times a county reported damage to roofs, trees, or power lines. Try cutting down on that a bit. Lemme know if you have any questions. I'll put the GAN on hold for now. --♫
Hurricanehink (
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03:14, 9 January 2013 (UTC)reply
The opening sentence - "Hurricane Debbie was the most powerful cyclone on record to strike Ireland in September. " - seems odd to me. Have other, stronger cyclones struck Ireland in other months of the year? Or should it be "Hurricane Debbie was the most powerful cyclone on record to strike Ireland, in September 1961. "?
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15:22, 9 May 2013 (UTC)reply